The reading states that in past century the growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to united states birds and these trends are likely to continue, with the result that number of birds will necessarily decline. And providing three supporting reasons. Conversely the professor says that these reasons that mentioned in the reading are unconvencing and refutes each claim in the reading.
First, the reading says that as human and settlements continue to expand, birds' natural habitats will continue to disappear. But the professor says that, this is true for some types of birds but it's much better to other types, there is increase in number of birds in land field, although it is not found in the city but it is not going to be a story to decrease the number of birds in future.
Second, the reading claims that, Agriculture activities must increase to keep pace with the growing human population. Such growth will result in the further destruction of bird habitats. However the professor says that, such activities will not away soon as the reading said. The truth is that less and less land used for agricultural activities.
Third the reading states that the use of chemical pesticides will also increase . Pesticides are poisons designed to kill agricultural and home garden pests, such as insects and this will get into the food chain for birds and they can harm birds. But the professor says that this is incorrect claim, in future there will be two changes : first, using of new , less toxic pesticides. Second: there will be a new corp which is resistant and unattractive to pets and they don't harm birds at all.
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reasons that mentioned in the reading are unconvencing
reasons that are mentioned in the reading are unconvincing
reasons mentioned in the reading are unconvincing
there is increase in number of birds
there is an increase in number of birds
although it is not found in the city but it is not going to be a story to decrease the number of birds in future.
Description: don't put 'although' 'but' in one sentence.
less and less land used for agricultural activities.
less and less land is used for agricultural activities.
this is incorrect claim
this is an incorrect claim
Sentence: Conversely the professor says that these reasons that mentioned in the reading are unconvencing and refutes each claim in the reading.
Error: unconvencing Suggestion: unconvincing
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 289 250
No. of Characters: 1378 1200
No. of Different Words: 136 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.123 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.484 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.695 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4