It is true that whether pop stars or classical music performers can make more fortune remains a source of controversy in the music field. While I accept that pop stars can earn much, I would argue that classical music can also make a lot of money for some of the following reasons.
Firstly, singers can earn money or not depends on their talents such as beautiful voice and their ability to perform on stage. For example, Mi Tam - a famous Vietnamese Pop star - whose talents stand out from other singers with a good voice, is also a gratefully dancer. In addition, she is very friendly with her fans which makes her popular all over the country. Moreover, she also has chances to perform live shows oversea. The more shows she takes part in the more money she can make. Besides, Tran Tien is one of the successful musicians and singers in classical music. He is known for his ability to compose music and sing very well, which makes him special. His fans are keen on his songs and his voice. He has been invited to perform in many big music occasions. The money that he earns is not less than any other famous pop stars.
Secondly, luck is another factor that helps singers in any kinds of music become famous. If a singer is lucky enough to have a song hit, he/ she will become famous in no time. Or when that singer takes part in a music contest, he/ she attracts big music companies and are invited to work for them. In exchange, he/ she will be provided with money, shows. His/ her name will be on advertisement and become popular in one night. Those singers will be able to earn a fortune regardless of whatever kinds of music they belong to.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, singers in any kinds of music are able to make a big fortune provided that they are talented and lucky.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: You used an adverb ('gratefully') instead an adjective, or a noun ('dancer') instead of another adjective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46084337349 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2472907103 2.80592935109 80% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503012048193 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3843561486 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9473684211 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4736842105 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205090351102 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695176827701 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708863554933 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138582122192 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105111520175 0.056905535591 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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