The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
The Provided Graph shows the amount of spare time both Males and Females of different employment Status by the year of 1998-1999.
Firstly, it is seen that both gender from unemployed and retired status are enjoyed during their leisure time. Unemployed male spend more time about 85 hours per week than female about 78. Apparently those who belongs retired group male had extra time about 83 hours than female about 78. Secondly those who are employed by full time and part time are half of the hours difference for unemployed and retired group. Full time male are much have time about 45 hours by women respectively. Part time and housewives women are engaged 40 and 50 hours leisure time and men are not mentioned in the graph.
In conclusion, it is clear those who are not in work and a retired group were enjoyed to spend their free time especially the men. Women had less time compared with men due to household duties and responsibilities
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The Provided Graph shows the amount of spare time both Males and Females of different employment Status
The Provided Graph shows the amount of spare time for/by both Males and Females of different employment Status
it is seen that both gender from unemployed and retired status are
it is seen that both genders from unemployed and retired status are
Unemployed male spend more time
Unemployed males spend more time
Apparently those who belongs retired group male had extra time
Apparently those who belong to retired group males had extra time
Full time male are much have time about 45 hours
Full time males have about 45 hours
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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 165 200
No. of Characters: 768 1000
No. of Different Words: 94 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.584 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.655 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.376 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 39 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 31 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 19 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.163 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.497 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.228 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4