We live in a world of technology these days While the internet brings with it clear advantages the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages To what extent do you agree

It is infutable that the modern era is blessed with the invention of technology, especially the internet. Though it has uncountable benefits, but the drawbacks in case of protecting the details is not negligible. In this essay we'll discuss on this issue. I believe, the merits outstrips the demerits.
On the positive side, Use of e-platforms has brought the world closer and turned it into a global village. Now, people all around the world are able to exchange cultures, products, education and so on, which never happened before. For example : A student from Asia is now able to enroll in a course offered by a renowned university of Europe through online. It has made the lives easier and has assisted every individuals to have their required things in the simplest but effective way.
Furthermore, because of online availability, businesses have spreaded rapidly. As a result, the economic growth is going up and employment opportunities are rising significantly. Secondly, with the social media influence, people can communicate with others from so far away. Distance is a mere scenario in today's world.
On the negative side, The authenticity and safety of using and sharing data is now questionable. Before entering several websites users have to fill up their personal information. Though, these sites assure not to reveal anything, but there are cases where this is violated. Additionally, there are many people like hackers who make someone fell into trap and it causes them harassments. However, these issues might be tackeled by proper awarness and strong regulations .
To conclude, I will reiterate my opinion that the benefits of internet are undoubtedly more than the drawbacks. It is recommended to overcome the limitations by providing enough guidance and creating maximum awarness.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29268292683 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94695138328 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.675958188153 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5239825304 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.9473684211 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1052631579 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 7.06120827912 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0743075079487 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185760920539 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0219237053291 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0357717499163 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00994880965621 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.81 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.38 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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