Muscle Man Gym wants to increase women member enrollment. The percentage of women who have monthly memberships is currently only 20%. In order to increase the number of women members, Muscle Man Gym should buy more cardiovascular equipment, because women like to use cardio machines. They should also advertise with pictures of body building women and should lower prices for women members. These methods will increase the number of women members, and will increase profits.
How would you rate the accuracy of the above statement? Support your position with reasons and examples.
The author of the argument concludes that if Muscle Man Gym would buy more cardiovascular equipment, advertise with pictures of body building women and lower prices for women members, then number of women members will increase and profits will also increase. But, there are several flaws in the argument which makes the argument a weaker argument. Several assumptions made by the author are given below.
Firstly, the author assumes that more women members will join the Muscle Man Gym just by some methods like buying more cardiovascular equipment, advertise with pictures of body building women and lower prices for women members. The author assumes that women will not consider the name of the gym that says "Muscle Man Gym" while joining the gym. If the name of the gym itself emphasizes men, no female will be interested in joining that gym. They will think that it is a gym for men. So, the author's conclusion would be seriously weakened if the name of the gym is not considered to increase women members.
To add on, another flaw in the argument is that the author states that women members will increase by lowering the price for women members. Then, the author also concludes that profits will also increase with increase in women members. If discounts are given to women members, it will obviously result in loss if number of women member increases. So, the author's conclusion is flawed that profits will increase if women members are increased. Instead, it might be possible that Muscle Man Gym could be in loss due to providing huge discounts to women members.
To sum up, the author assumes that advertising pictures of body building women will increase women members in the gym. This assumption can strengthen or weaken the conclusion of the author's argument. It might be possible that many women want to join the gym just for being fit and not body building, then advertising pictures of body building women will be of no use to the gym. It will not increase women members in the gym. So, it proves the author's conclusion wrong. But, if the situation is different and most women want to join the gym for body building, then the author's conclusion could be strengthened.
So, if the author provides some more information about the name of the gym, feasibility of discounts given to women members and interests of most women to join the gym, then the argument will be more stronger and convincing. But, the author has many flaws in the argument and reaches to the conclusion by considering various assumptions. Therefore, the argument by the author is not a persuasive argument. Hence, I remain unconvinced.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 446 350
No. of Characters: 2128 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.771 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.526 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.038 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...with pictures of body building women and lower prices for women members, then num...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...think that it is a gym for men. So, the authors conclusion would be seriously weakened ...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...embers, it will obviously result in loss if number of women member increases. So,...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...mber of women member increases. So, the authors conclusion is flawed that profits will ...
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Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...engthen or weaken the conclusion of the authors argument. It might be possible that man...
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Line 7, column 445, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n members in the gym. So, it proves the authors conclusion wrong. But, if the situation...
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Line 7, column 570, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...oin the gym for body building, then the authors conclusion could be strengthened. So...
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Line 9, column 196, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...join the gym, then the argument will be more stronger and convincing. But, the author has man...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, then, therefore, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 446.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92600896861 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6011452255 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.336322869955 0.468620217663 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.9060385884 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5217391304 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3913043478 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26086956522 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399754739426 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163003679061 0.0743258471296 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140112120941 0.0701772020484 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289370428337 0.128457276422 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755810561308 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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