Some people may believe that Internet access need to be improved by the governments. However, I disagree with the statement that It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
I will describe the reasons to support my opinion below.
First of all, there are a lot of opportunities to be improved regarding the public transportation. In Japan, more than 100 people died every year due to the tragedic accident at the stations, which suggests that more secure system is required for the public transportation.
Also, crimes in the trains are also typical in Japan. Many women suffer from unknown men who touch women’s bodies while commuting, which is a serious problem in Japan. When I traveled to NY, there were so many homeless people screaming in the trains and the stations, which made me feel scrared. This unstable situation is a priority for the governments. These examples clearly suggest that there are a lot of pain points to be fixed for the public transportation.
Second, eldely people cannot live a normal life without a good quality of public transportation. For elderly generations, driving is thought to be very risky because their vision is not as good as younger generations. However, they need to go to the grocery stores, hospitals, cityhalls or other essential places. In my grandfather’s case, he returned his driver licence and uses buses to go to the destinations every day. Without public transportation, he cannot move around.This clearly shows that public transportation is must-have solution for people who are older than 70.
Certainly, some people might claim that Internet access is more essential because people get most of information throught the internet today. However, in most countries, the Internet access is operated by the companies, not governments. Therefore, even if the government use money for it, the governments’ impact on the Internet access is limited.
In summary, for the reasons I mentioned above, I strongly believe that public transportation is more critical for citizens and it is necessary to be funded by the governments.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26801152738 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08537478697 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538904899135 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9174183625 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2105263158 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319973175739 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962295327899 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125516477428 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165971151192 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134369954513 0.0645574589148 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e reasons to support my opinion below. First of all, there are a lot of opportu...
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...e fixed for the public transportation. Second, eldely people cannot live a norm...
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...c transportation, he cannot move around.This clearly shows that public transportatio...
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...tion for people who are older than 70. Certainly, some people might claim that ...
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...act on the Internet access is limited. In summary, for the reasons I mentioned ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26801152738 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08537478697 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538904899135 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9174183625 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2105263158 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319973175739 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962295327899 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125516477428 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165971151192 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134369954513 0.0645574589148 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.