Task 2: An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why do people have operations to change the way they look? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In recent years, there has been a notable surge in the number of individuals opting for cosmetic surgery to enhance their physical appearance. While some argue that this phenomenon is controversial, I believe that cosmetic surgery has a negative impact on an individual’s quality of life and the reasons behind people opting for cosmetic procedures.
One significant reason people choose to undergo cosmetic surgery is the desire to boost their self-esteem and self-confidence. For many, self-esteem is closely linked to body image and how to they perceive themselves in comparison to societal beauty standards. When people feel dissatisfied with their appearance, it can erode their self-confidence and contribute to feelings of inadequacy or self-doubt. By addressing these concerns through cosmetic surgery, individuals can experience a significant boost in self-confidence, leading to a more positive self-image and allowing them to enjoy a better quality of life.
Furthermore, societal and cultural pressures play a vital role in the decision to undergo cosmetic surgery. In many societies, people feel pressured to conform to beauty standards that prioritize physical appearance. This external pressure can lead people to seek cosmetic procedures as a means to fit or meet societal expectations, particularly in industries where appearance plays a significant role in career advancement.
Although there are potential benefits associated with cosmetic surgery, I firmly believe that its negative aspects should be considered as well. Firstly, all surgical procedures carry potential risks, including infection, scarring or even pose a threat to an individual's life. In reality, for profit-driven purposes, many cosmetic clinics that do not meet the required standards have resulted in unsuccessful cosmetic surgeries and horrifying complications in patients or even resulting in fatalities . Moreover, social pressures to conform to narrow beauty ideas can be detrimental, fostering a culture of body dissatisfaction and driving individuals toward unnecessary surgeries.
In conclusion, although cosmetic surgery is considered an appropriate approach to enhancing physical appearance and seizing opportunities for faster career advancement, I firmly believe that if society places too much emphasis on beauty standards through cosmetic surgery, it will lead to unpredictable consequences.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...While some argue that this phenomenon is controversial, I believe that cosmetic s...
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Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...n, scarring or even pose a threat to an individuals life. In reality, for profit-driven pur...
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Line 4, column 501, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...patients or even resulting in fatalities . Moreover, social pressures to conform t...
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Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is considered an appropriate approach to enhancing physical appearance and seizin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95942028986 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3709632695 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571014492754 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1755629927 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.857142857 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207509389816 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713438075359 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049059432182 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111429988365 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323365685348 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.58 12.4159519038 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.23 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...While some argue that this phenomenon is controversial, I believe that cosmetic s...
^^
Line 4, column 260, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...n, scarring or even pose a threat to an individuals life. In reality, for profit-driven pur...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 501, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...patients or even resulting in fatalities . Moreover, social pressures to conform t...
^^
Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is considered an appropriate approach to enhancing physical appearance and seizin...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95942028986 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3709632695 2.80592935109 120% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571014492754 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1755629927 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.857142857 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207509389816 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713438075359 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049059432182 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111429988365 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323365685348 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.58 12.4159519038 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.23 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.