integrated writing TPO 7

In this set of material both the passage and the speaker are talking about whether the certifications to wood companies it's good or not. The reading claims that, it's unlikely that wood companies in the United States will do the same as companies around the world, and it provides three supporting reasons. Conversely the professor see that companies will do the same as the world's companies , and he refutes each claim in the reading.

First, the reading argues that, American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertification label.However the professor syas that, they don't treat an advertisement the same, they distinguished between the own and independents. And most Americans will favor the independent than the other one. This directly contradicts what's the passage indicates.

Second, the reading states that, ecocertified wood will be more expensive than uncertified wood. But the professor says that , yes this is true. But , there is a study on how the decision made , and when their is difference in price for small amount like 5 % so the American would choose the factor rather than the price. This was another place where the experience contradicted a theory.

Third, the reading says that, pursuing certification would make sense for American wood companies only if they marketed most of their products abroad. However the professor says that, they will pay attention to the wood companies not because of foreign consumers but because of foriegn competitor companies. Because if these wood companies will not offer a good product this will lead a lot of foriegn companies be in the markets.

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whether the certifications to wood companies it's good or not
whether the certifications to wood companies are good or not

Sentence: Conversely the professor see that companies will do the same as the world's companies , and he refutes each claim in the reading.
Description: The fragment professor see that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace see with verb, past tense

Sentence: But , there is a study on how the decision made , and when their is difference in price for small amount like 5 so the American would choose the factor rather than the price.
Description: The tag a determiner, possessive is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Refer to their and is

will lead a lot of foriegn companies be in the markets.
will lead a lot of foriegn companies being in the markets.

Sentence: First, the reading argues that, American consumers are exposed to so much advertising that they would not value or even pay attention to the ecocertification label.However the professor syas that, they don't treat an advertisement the same, they distinguished between the own and independents.
Error: syas Suggestion: says

Sentence: However the professor says that, they will pay attention to the wood companies not because of foreign consumers but because of foriegn competitor companies.
Error: foriegn Suggestion: foreign

Sentence: Because if these wood companies will not offer a good product this will lead a lot of foriegn companies be in the markets.
Error: foriegn Suggestion: foreign

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 274 250
No. of Characters: 1366 1200
No. of Different Words: 149 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.985 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.735 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.579 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4