Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some people assume that it is unnecessary for employers to comment on how their employees dress to workplace since work quality is what should be prioritized. In my opinion, I totally support this statement as what employers should pay attention to is not a frivolous matter such as employees’ clothes.
To begin with, when employers are too critical at how their workers dress to work, employees somehow cannot produce the desired productivity since they only care about dressing to please the bosses’ eyes instead. Thus, whenever they meet their bosses, they will always go for adjusting their clothes or hair to suit the employers’ preference first, so as to not be criticized because of unscrupulous appearances. This means that the quality of work is underestimated since workers only care about dressing to please bosses instead of focusing on working effectively, which can directly affect work quality. If employers care too much about clothes, the main purpose of working becomes meaningless.
Moreover, instead of employees’ fashion, what employers should be concerned about are work environment and employees’ work competence instead. These factors are decisive to a better work productivity and work outcomes. When working in a friendly environment where employees and bosses help each other learn and progress, the quality of work can be improved significantly. Furthermore, employers should be paying attention to their employees’ abilities at work. Even if their employees are well-dressed but incompetent for the occupation, their essence is useless to the development of a business.
In conclusion, I believe that employees’ ways of dressing is not what employers should take into consideration. However, they should be attentive to establish a friendly workplace and employ competent people to improve work productivity to strengthen their business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57491289199 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12409707239 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529616724739 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6461566878 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.076923077 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449794848175 0.244688304435 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180350449235 0.084324248473 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712497542423 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308757462377 0.151304729494 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546681072408 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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