People are now more aware of their personal needs like personal care in the matter of beauty and health. Beauty is given much more importance then health and so health matters are getting marginalized.
Both health and beauty are important in life. No doubt that people are more aware than past in such matters. However, it is also true that people give much importance to beauty and ignored some health needs.
To put the matter into proper light, health is very important in life.It can be improved in many ways. Health demands fresh and nutritious food and doing regular exercises and activities in daily life. Nutritious food give energy to body for doing work and exercises give relaxation and keep mind fresh. Moreover, only healthy person can do jobs in better way. In addition, such person can easily start his own business and be successful in life. So health plays vital role in one's success.
To illustrate the matter further, people give more importance to beauty rather than health. They spend much money to look beautiful and attractive. For example, some people waste money on face surgeries to look young in old age. Furthermore, chemicals are being used for body care. But these ways effect their health and life badly. It is artificial way of life.
Beauty and health both are equally important in life. So health needs do not be ignored. Also it is obvious that only a health person can look beautiful , and sick person can not look attractive and unable to do jobs in better way. So, there is need to improve health also.
In Conclusion, natural beauty is more attractive than artificial beauty. So, only beauty should not be improved but for get success in life there is need to concentrate on health needs.
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