you have been told that dormitory room at your university must be shared by two students. Would you rather have the university assign a student to share the room with you, or would you rather choose your own roomate? use specific example and details.
Chossing the right dormatory is the most imortant decision that the students should take. In order to foucus on their studies, student have to choose a well orgonized dormatory where the student are prohibited to set-up patries or speake loudly. However, If the university rules implies that students should share rooms with a roommate. I prefer to choose my own roommate. The basis for my views is because giveing me the chance to select my own roommate, will limites the conflicts, and increase the benefit between both of us, compared with the roommate that the university will assigne to me.
Selecting a roommate with similer behavior and attitude, will minimize the arguments betwwen us. Of course, it is normal part in our life that sometimes we argue even though with our partners or close friends. However, living with some one totaly different than my personalty can pose some risk on our relationship. For example, assigned roomate may prefer to watch T.V. late at night, listen to songs on the speakers or talk to his/her family late at night. Such behaviors are completely unaccepted to me. In contrast, If I choose my roomate, I will have a previous idea about his/her attetude and behavior. For instance, a friend of mine prefer to sleep early, listen to the music on his headphones and when he talk to his parent he talk to them with a minimum disturbance to the people around him. Thus, For this reasons, If I have to choose a roomate, I will choose him because he is very similier to my behavior and attitude.
In addition to the simmilarty in behavior, choosing a roommate from the same academic field or back ground can add a great benefits to my education process. Choosing a roomate from the same class can have a tangled effect on my studies. For instance, if I missed one of the class, I can barrow my roommate note's. Moreover, I can ask my roomate to expalin the subject that I missed. Also, by studing to gother, my roommate can encourage me to foucus on my study. However, having a roommate from another feild could have limited or no benefits to me.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that Although some students prefer to let the university choose their roommate as they prefer not to emparisse their friends, chossing a roommate I know can have a less conflect and more benefits to me.
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will limites the conflicts
will limit the conflicts
a friend of mine prefer to sleep early
a friend of mine prefers to sleep early
when he talk to his parent he talk to them
when he talks to his parent he talks to them
add a great benefits
add a great of benefits
add a great benefit
Sentence: Thus, For this reasons, If I have to choose a roomate, I will choose him because he is very similier to my behavior and attitude.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and reasons
Sentence: Chossing the right dormatory is the most imortant decision that the students should take.
Error: imortant Suggestion: important
Error: dormatory Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In order to foucus on their studies, student have to choose a well orgonized dormatory where the student are prohibited to set-up patries or speake loudly.
Error: orgonized Suggestion: organized
Error: foucus Suggestion: focus
Error: set-up Suggestion: setup
Error: dormatory Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: patries Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: speake Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The basis for my views is because giveing me the chance to select my own roommate, will limites the conflicts, and increase the benefit between both of us, compared with the roommate that the university will assigne to me.
Error: assigne Suggestion: assigned
Error: giveing Suggestion: giving
Sentence: Selecting a roommate with similer behavior and attitude, will minimize the arguments betwwen us.
Error: similer Suggestion: similar
Error: betwwen Suggestion: between
Sentence: However, living with some one totaly different than my personalty can pose some risk on our relationship.
Error: totaly Suggestion: total
Sentence: For example, assigned roomate may prefer to watch T.V. late at night, listen to songs on the speakers or talk to his/her family late at night.
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In contrast, If I choose my roomate, I will have a previous idea about his/her attetude and behavior.
Error: attetude Suggestion: attitude
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thus, For this reasons, If I have to choose a roomate, I will choose him because he is very similier to my behavior and attitude.
Error: similier Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addition to the simmilarty in behavior, choosing a roommate from the same academic field or back ground can add a great benefits to my education process.
Error: simmilarty Suggestion: similarly
Sentence: Choosing a roomate from the same class can have a tangled effect on my studies.
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For instance, if I missed one of the class, I can barrow my roommate note's. Moreover, I can ask my roomate to expalin the subject that I missed.
Error: expalin Suggestion: explain
Error: roomate Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Also, by studing to gother, my roommate can encourage me to foucus on my study.
Error: foucus Suggestion: focus
Error: studing Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: gother Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, having a roommate from another feild could have limited or no benefits to me.
Error: feild Suggestion: field
Sentence: As a conclusion, we can safely say that Although some students prefer to let the university choose their roommate as they prefer not to emparisse their friends, chossing a roommate I know can have a less conflect and more benefits to me.
Error: chossing Suggestion: crossing
Error: emparisse Suggestion: express
Error: conflect Suggestion: conflict
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 26 2
Double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 26 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 409 350
No. of Characters: 1860 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.497 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.548 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.485 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.853 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es that students should share rooms with a roommate. I prefer to choose my own ro...
^^
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
... or close friends. However, living with some one totaly different than my personalty can...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
..., living with some one totaly different than my personalty can pose some risk on our...
^^^^
Line 3, column 623, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her attetude and behavior. For instance, a friend of mine prefer to sleep early, ...
^^
Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'talks'.
Suggestion: talks
...the music on his headphones and when he talk to his parent he talk to them with a mi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 737, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'talks'.
Suggestion: talks
...hones and when he talk to his parent he talk to them with a minimum disturbance to t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 780, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...k to them with a minimum disturbance to the people around him. Thus, For this reasons, If I have to c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 813, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...nce to the people around him. Thus, For this reasons, If I have to choose a roomate,...
^^^^
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...expalin the subject that I missed. Also, by studing to gother, my roommate can en...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209251101322 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.154185022026 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0506607929515 0.0866891130778 58% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0396475770925 0.046263068375 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.105726872247 0.0685040099705 154% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114537444934 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0286343612335 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58218450827 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.057268722467 0.0309702414327 185% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0947136563877 0.0887237588012 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0374449339207 0.0209618222197 179% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00440528634361 0.0139019557991 32% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2326.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71498771499 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375921375921 0.338922669872 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272727272727 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201474201474 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0859950859951 0.112833075102 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58218450827 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5085995086 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 56.3545687632 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.380952381 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3107094872 48.84282405 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.761904762 120.699889404 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.619047619048 0.644075263715 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 46.6536796537 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.17647058824 1.45489161554 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224853548756 0.300154397459 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119800053211 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0880013430792 0.0752933317313 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.476491912926 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.187307918738 0.151897553556 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884115455627 0.114077575197 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414053495069 0.0781384742642 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351807132702 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0531091578474 0.067059652881 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161466614643 0.210909579961 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490275624923 0.0618886996521 79% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.6433691756 66% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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