Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It goes without saying that our families play an important role in our lives so many young adults would rather live with their family for a longer time. However, others people think that it would be a better idea for children to be independent of their parents as soon as they can. I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, by becoming independent, children would learn and prepare better to live alone in the future. No matter how old we are, we all have to move out of our parents’ house sooner or later to start to own families. Consequently, we must acquire all the skills needed to live on our own. There is no better way to do that than to be independent since we were young. My own experience is a good example to illustrate this. Ever since I was a kid, I had the dream of studying abroad and I remember being told that it wasn’t easy to get used to living alone in the university’s campus. As the result, when I was ten years old, I started to learn to become more self-reliant. I was taught the fundamental skills such as cooking meals or doing the laundry. Because of that, I didn’t have a hard time familiarizing myself with the life in university.
Furthermore, if we really love our parents, we ought not to always bother them and not to rely on them too much. Unfortunately, parents are getting older day by day. Their aging results in continual tiredness and occasional sickness. Therefore, we should let them have time to relax and enjoy their lives by being independent of them. For example, my parents are aging, they tend to be tired very often so I don’t want them to think for me too much.Since I went studying abroad and lead an independent life of my parents, they have had more time together and for relaxation. They don’t have to take me to school every day like they used to do and don’t need to tidy my room every morning. Without me at home, they are able to go on vacations more often and they won’t ever be stressed out because of worrying about me since they know that I can live independently.
In conclusion, I truly believe that a young adult should live independently of their parents. This is because independence would teach the children to prepare for living alone and children shouldn’t always bother their parent so they can enjoy their lives. Moreover, knowing that their child is independent, parents don’t have to worry about their child too much.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.147773279352 0.229887763892 64% => OK
Verbs: 0.202429149798 0.158761421928 128% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0748987854251 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0769230769231 0.046263068375 166% => OK
Pronouns: 0.123481781377 0.0685040099705 180% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111336032389 0.118717715034 94% => OK
Participles: 0.0425101214575 0.0351676179071 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61436109798 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0506072874494 0.0309702414327 163% => OK
Particles: 0.00202429149798 0.00188951952338 107% => OK
Determiners: 0.0587044534413 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242914979757 0.0209618222197 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00607287449393 0.0139019557991 44% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2531.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 450.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62444444444 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.271111111111 0.338922669872 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.191111111111 0.251872472559 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.128888888889 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0777777777778 0.112833075102 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61436109798 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506666666667 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 57.8954535708 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5652173913 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7926286344 48.84282405 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.043478261 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5652173913 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 38.6763285024 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 0.748743718593 1.45489161554 51% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329201413337 0.300154397459 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100662138673 0.103427244359 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0767635758376 0.0752933317313 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.449663633941 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139063515462 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106971317462 0.114077575197 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537236325309 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.30826489093 0.336927656856 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.035231075631 0.067059652881 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230882338836 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380885663408 0.0618886996521 62% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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