Nowadays people becoming parents later in life. Some think it is not a good development for the family and for the country. Do you agree or disagree with it? Give your own opinion.
Undeniably, late parenthood is gaining ground nowadays. Although, there are some advantages in this, I believe it will leave adverse impacts in the ever changing society.
To begin with, diseases are common in the later life of people. systemic diseases like heart diseases, diabetic and so are common during this period. These diseases are dangerously effect the future generation, because these diseases are passing to the next generation through genes. Hence, to build up a healthy young generation, late parenthood should be minimized.
Secondly, people in their later lives, may face difficult...
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systemic diseases like heart
systemic diseases like heart diseases, diabetic and so are common during this period.
-> Capitalise the first letter
These diseases are dangerously effect the future generation, because these diseases are passing to the next generation through genes.
->These diseases are dangerously affecting the future generation, because they are passed on to the next generation through genes.
Hence, to build up a healthy young generation, late parenthood should be minimized.
->Hence, to make young generation healthier, late parenthood should be minimized.
Secondly, people in their later lives, may face difficulty in parentering, as they became old people who may workaholic and not interested in bringing up or spending time with their own children.
This sentence need revise in its structure
Secondly, people in their later lives may face difficulty in parenting. As they become old, people may be workaholic and not interested in ....
……..and they may oblige to compensate their family life for career.
…, and they may oblige to sacrify their family life for career.
A senior gynecologist may force to give preference to her patients and she is supposed to attend the patient in case of emergency, even if she was hosting an important function of her child’s first birthday.
–> A senior gynecologist is supposed to attend the patient in case of emergency, and she may feel obliged to give preference to her patients and even if she is hosting an important function of her child’s first birthday.
The professional parents who are more devoted allocate more time to work, leaves little or no time to spend with their children.
The professional parents who are more devoted allocate more time to work, leaving little or no time to spend with their children.
Young children may feel to introduce a aged man or woman as their parent.
–> Young children may feel (adj here) to introduce an aged man or woman as their parent.
Therefore, I totally disagreeing with the idea of late parenthood.
->Therefore, I totally disagree ...
Sentence: Secondly, people in their later lives, may face difficulty in parentering, as they became old people who may workaholic and not interested in bringing up or spending time with their own children.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to may and workaholic
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