Should young people be given enough time to help their communities? Some contend that the children should contribute to help their communities to help them to fell devotion to their societies, and gain more experience. From my personal experience, I am a normal high school student who is smothered by the strict education system and have no time to spend on other things. Therefore, I would like to suggest that young people nowadays should not be given enough time to help their communities. To further explain my point of view, I will elaborate on my point in more details.
First of all, the major responsibility of the young is to keep studying hard and enhance their grade as much as possible. They are taught to do so and the pressure from school and parents also force them to do so. Expectations from school and parents make them become more and more indifferent to community responsibilities. Furthermore, children simply have no time to focus on their communities because of their uncountable homework. Take me as an example. After finishing an eleven-hour school time and burying me into the homework and assignment, the last thing I can afford is moving to the bedroom. So when it comes to any call from the community office to engage inhabitants to take part in community service, I have always been escaping. This means too little time left for the young children may cause their isolation from social responsibilities. Therefore, it is impossible for the young squeeze time into doing community activities even though they are given enough time.
Secondly, nowadays in the modern metropolis, there are too ample entertainments distracting young children. Electronic devices such as TV, cell phone, and computers have got most teenagers addicted because the intriguing plots and extravagant scenes make them completely enthralled. Therefore even for those teenagers who have fewer requirements to complete, helping their communities won't be a priority on a list. For instance, my little brother is one of the children who have a special affection for television. He spends most of his spare time watching the cartoon and doesn't even pay attention to my mother. What's more, I remember that merely last week did his teacher call my mother to attend a parent-teacher meeting which was finally presented to me because of my mother's busy business. During the meeting his teacher suggested me to curb my brother from television watching, since he could not even hand on his homework, not to say community services.
Third, it seems that volunteer work in my community is not appreciated. For example, my friends volunteered to help clean a local park. They worked hard all afternoon long. However, when they finished, no one there even said “thank you” to them. In the following week, the park was dirty again. That really disappointed and frustrated my friends very much. Since then, none of them has shown any interest in doing volunteer work again. They do not consider it as a good use of their time. When no one seems appreciated what youths do volunteer work for their community, they will stop give time to help the community.
In sum, after considering the numerous homework of school and the attraction of electronic devices, I would like to suggest that young people nowadays do not give enough time to help with their community services. I believe if the school and family press put less pressure on young people and make sure they don't get themselves tempted by distractions, there would be a more harmonious society waiting for us in the near future.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 601 350 //Write the essay in 30 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 601 350
No. of Characters: 2914 1500
No. of Different Words: 287 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.951 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.849 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.718 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 73 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.781 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.987 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.266 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.446 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'for example', 'for instance', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222891566265 0.229887763892 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.171686746988 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.085843373494 0.0866891130778 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0677710843373 0.046263068375 146% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0918674698795 0.0685040099705 134% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0963855421687 0.118717715034 81% => OK
Participles: 0.039156626506 0.0351676179071 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.83163700733 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0436746987952 0.0309702414327 141% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0647590361446 0.0887237588012 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0165662650602 0.0209618222197 79% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0120481927711 0.0139019557991 87% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3624.0 2387.08602151 152% => OK
No of words: 598.0 408.028673835 147% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0602006689 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94510247834 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.332775919732 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252508361204 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19397993311 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147157190635 0.112833075102 130% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83163700733 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494983277592 0.524397521467 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 61.2700231785 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6684587814 155% => OK
Sentence length: 18.6875 20.5533526081 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4479566868 48.84282405 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.25 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.5533526081 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.59375 0.644075263715 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 43.9383361204 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.08181818182 1.45489161554 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322714262186 0.300154397459 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0978693197498 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0902425250307 0.0752933317313 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.423377526346 0.497263757937 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149098060775 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103707202618 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770753335614 0.0781384742642 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.323986595891 0.336927656856 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.078426367713 0.067059652881 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219000567159 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049522265172 0.0618886996521 80% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.86379928315 311% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 11.0 2.4623655914 447% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 29.0 13.6433691756 213% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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