You heard that the cafeteria at your work is planned for closure, as it's not in use. write a letter top your manager and request to cancel this decision. state the reason for it not being in use, why is it important to leave it open, suggest what to do with this place.
Dear sir,
Greetings of the day. I am inspired to write this letter in order to represent my point of view in the decision of management to close the cafeteria of the organization. I trust that management must have taken this decision on the ground of facts which must be in the favour of the organization. However, there is another part of the issue which ask your thought before initiating the process.
Hope you have noticed that there are 30 to 35% of the employee who are non-residential of this city and living alone in PG. In absence of family, the cafeteria is the good source of an authentic and hygienic meal for them. I understand that apart from those 35% employees, the cafeteria is rarely used by rest of the employees which causes a huge waste of food and loss of money behind maintenance to the organization.It is not that employees don't find the use of this cafeteria . However, The restricted menu and its cost are the explicit reasons behind the nonuse of cafeteria by other employees. The cost leads the employees to eat out for their refreshments which also gulp huge amount of employee time .
In my opinion , we can address these problems with the different solution rather choosing to close the cafeteria. In my view, if the cafeteria will be offered to some contractor to run it, can help both employees and management to serve their purpose. I hope management will think on my suggestion to develop a win-win situation for both the parties.
Awaiting for your positive response.
Thanking you,
Yours Faithfully,
Bhumika Suryavanshi
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Essay evaluation report
there is another part of the issue which ask your thought before initiating the process.
there is another part of the issue which asks your thoughts before initiating the process.
Sentence: However, The restricted menu and its cost are the explicit reasons behind the nonuse of cafeteria by other employees.
Error: nonuse Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 8.0 out of 9
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1256 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.652 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.703 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.762 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.353 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.27 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.679 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir, Greetings of the day. I am inspired to w...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed by rest of the employees which causes a huge waste of food and loss of money b...
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Line 5, column 421, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
... behind maintenance to the organization.It is not that employees dont find the use...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e organization.It is not that employees dont find the use of this cafeteria . Howeve...
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Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...yees dont find the use of this cafeteria . However, The restricted menu and its co...
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Line 5, column 709, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h also gulp huge amount of employee time . In my opinion , we can address thes...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...unt of employee time . In my opinion , we can address these problems with the ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: AWAITING_FOR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'awaiting' or 'waiting for'?
Suggestion: Awaiting; Waiting for
...win situation for both the parties. Awaiting for your positive response. Thanking yo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'apart from', 'in my opinion', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262798634812 0.220444632235 119% => OK
Verbs: 0.150170648464 0.167888034529 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.037542662116 0.0606518309736 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0238907849829 0.0506257000042 47% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.061433447099 0.118615021944 52% => OK
Prepositions: 0.139931740614 0.107062808482 131% => OK
Participles: 0.037542662116 0.041066498444 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80309251556 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.037542662116 0.0385302599488 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00341296928328 0.00132118243153 258% => OK
Determiners: 0.133105802048 0.0714148451538 186% => Less determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0204778156997 0.0191574576366 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0170648464164 0.00930345855455 183% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1580.0 1141.60824742 138% => OK
No of words: 271.0 206.134020619 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83025830258 5.53046319177 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 3.78085437643 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.291512915129 0.284621296913 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243542435424 0.211203875043 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19926199262 0.133321485273 149% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.132841328413 0.0843313296314 158% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80309251556 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568265682657 0.622163163488 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 58.2862938475 62.8969750728 93% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 12.9587628866 108% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3571428571 16.4300151701 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.654437571 44.7399317507 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.857142857 90.9928171075 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 16.4300151701 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.613754768223 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.09278350515 382% => OK
Readability: 43.7113863996 37.5504026743 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.86956521739 1.13073093955 165% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3354862971 0.331212695627 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.153894685291 0.0927372745006 166% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0882968009539 0.0736520305886 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.67494789534 0.579516596996 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.131947987341 0.180689518051 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138682309916 0.122183219658 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656088749293 0.0765303033291 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.29215042353 0.211926503985 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.228427975172 0.0737400523855 310% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212710243426 0.203819188451 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579113579529 0.067151250289 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.45360824742 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.48453608247 202% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.0206185567 25% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 4.73195876289 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 1.03092783505 291% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.56701030928 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 8.32989690722 132% => OK
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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