The community that we live in is one of the most important parts of our life. It is very we ineract with others, study, and work. So, each one of us are responsable to help our community to improve and prosper. Some people believe that nowadays young people do not give enough time to help their communities. Others disagree. In my view, they don't spend enough time for their community for two important reasons.
First, nowadays, young people have lots of things to do. In the past few dacades, youngers are more intrested in being seccessful. To do so, they have to do thing that their parents did not need to do, when they were young. For example, I started to go to university when I was 18-years-old. In other words, there was no break for me after highschool, and right after graduating from highschool, I started my university level studies. That was not the case, for my parents. According to them, in their times, high-level edjucation was not intresting to most young people so they had more time to work, and help their communites. Another example that I can give is applying abroad. Nowadays, most of the Iranian youngsers have the dream of living in other countries, so they have to work harder and learn and do things that they would not have had to do, if they wanted to stay in their own country. Take me for example, I am graduated from university and even though I can easily work, and benifit my community, but instead I have spend my time studying for TOEFL test, to be able to continiue my studies in another contery. Ofcourse, this was not the case, 20 years age. So, as you can see because of the extera things that young people have to do, they can't give enough time for their community.
Second, there are more entertaining devices that has made youngsters forget about their community. Nowadays, things like computers, video games, and other entertaining stuffs, take most of the kids and teenagers times. For example, when I was a child I was addicted to play video games. I remmeber every day, I spend at list 6 hours on playing games. My grandparents used to tell me, when they were in my age, they used to help their parents and also other people in their works, and they were much more useful than I am to their community. I think if in those times, video games and other fun entertaining devices were avalible they would done the same thing as I was doing. This experience thought me that, one of the main reasons why young people don't help their community is that there are lots of fun things to do.
So in sum, I thing nowadays youngster don't spend enough time for improving their communities. Not only do they have lots of things to do, but they also, preocupaid with entertaining devices that was not available in past decades.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'i think', 'in my view', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.194003527337 0.229887763892 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.188712522046 0.158761421928 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0793650793651 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047619047619 0.046263068375 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.109347442681 0.0685040099705 160% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109347442681 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0299823633157 0.0351676179071 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47186517535 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.042328042328 0.0309702414327 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0388007054674 0.0887237588012 44% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00881834215168 0.0209618222197 42% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0123456790123 0.0139019557991 89% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2769.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 497.0 408.028673835 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57142857143 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.263581488934 0.338922669872 78% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.187122736419 0.251872472559 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.136820925553 0.174417080927 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0985915492958 0.112833075102 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47186517535 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438631790744 0.524397521467 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.8142796318 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6684587814 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.4074074074 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0573704837 48.84282405 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.555555556 120.699889404 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4074074074 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.37037037037 0.644075263715 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 37.1196810493 45.7405998639 81% => OK
Elegance: 0.964285714286 1.45489161554 66% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351635609726 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.067380858643 0.103427244359 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0630857124814 0.0752933317313 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.401376726937 0.497263757937 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153844272289 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126499718664 0.114077575197 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154477408018 0.0781384742642 198% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.40658334658 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0941700504387 0.067059652881 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272123572952 0.210909579961 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720991912769 0.0618886996521 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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