The following appeared in an announcement issued by the publisher of The Mercury, a weekly newspaper:
“Since a competing lower-priced newspaper, The Bugle, was started five years ago, The Mercury’s circulation has declined by 10,000 readers. The best way to get more people to read The Mercury is to reduce its price below that of The Bugle, at least until circulation increases to former levels. The increased circulation of The Mercury will attract more businesses to buy advertising space in the paper.”
The above argument states that a new marketing strategy of The Bugle, decreasing the price of newspaper, has affected the demand of The Mercury for the last five years. Therefore, the Mercury plans to make the price lower than their competitor to attract more readers. Moreover, the author claims that it will rise the number of clients who will post their advertisements in the Mercury’s newspaper. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumption for which there is no lucid evidence. Hence, the argument is not convincing and has several loopholes.
First, the author claims that there is a direct link between a declined number of readers and the introduction of a new price strategy of a rival, The Bugle. Nevertheless, he has ignored several facts. For instance, the decreased demand might be a result of the diminished level of a quality of articles. Additionally, there might be other competitors applying various marketing strategies. Moreover, the author has not mentioned the circulation of The Bugle. Hence, we are not aware of situation at the market. So, there could be other reasons as for instance, the market totally has decreased as nowadays people prefer internet sources of news to newspapers. The author has overlooked all these factors, hence, the argument cannot be concluded on the basis of these statements.
Another point is about the author has not mentioned the fields of newspapers. Whether the areas of topics of these two newspapers are totally different from each other, it is illogical to categorize them in the same group and compare. If The Bugle is the political newspaper and The Mercury is the medical newspaper, there is a very low probability that they will affect each other circulation. Hence, it can be concluded that this argument is incomplete and deprived of enough evidence. Therefore, this conclusion is not very convincing.
There is one more low point of this argument. According to the conclusion of this argument, the risen level of circulation of the Mercury will affect the number of businesses who are willing to post advertisement in the newspaper. However, other circumstances are neglected. The increased number of readers does not signify the efficiency of advertising. Other facts as the fee of advertisement, the readership of newspaper and etc. are taken into account by businesses while selecting newspapers to publish their advertisement. So, the author has simply skipped this line of reasoning.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. The author should take into consideration the current situation at the market overall, the degree of quality of newspapers articles, all competitors, and etc. Moreover, in order to be comparable the newspapers should have identical areas of topics. Before any decision is made, all these things must be considered. In the end, we can say that this argument needs a detailed study of many other factors and the author should have provided a few proofs and data to establish this relationship.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
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Line 10, column 252, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...f newspapers articles, all competitors, and etc. Moreover, in order to be comparable the...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'as for', 'for instance', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.245989304813 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.140819964349 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0855614973262 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0427807486631 0.0520304965353 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0196078431373 0.0272364105082 72% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121212121212 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0392156862745 0.0416121511921 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.00690359637 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0160427807487 0.026700313972 60% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.146167557932 0.113004496875 129% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0249554367201 0.0255425247493 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00534759358289 0.0127820249294 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3078.0 2731.13054187 113% => OK
No of words: 495.0 446.07635468 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.21818181818 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391919191919 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288888888889 0.287650121315 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224242424242 0.208842608468 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177777777778 0.135150697306 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00690359637 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 207.018472906 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458585858586 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 52.4204619229 52.1807786196 100% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.039408867 150% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5 23.2022227129 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5443707294 57.7814097925 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 141.986410481 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 23.2022227129 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.433333333333 0.724660767414 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 45.3888888889 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 2.0 1.8405768891 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.51773620596 0.441005458295 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.095301647848 0.135418324435 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0606199049467 0.0829849096947 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.515943892839 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192435416237 0.147661913831 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20332924577 0.193483328276 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147034141429 0.0970749176394 151% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.549279811802 0.42659136922 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0539506012991 0.0774707102158 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.395374197153 0.312017818177 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893591684502 0.0698173142475 128% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.87684729064 204% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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