While it may be one of the way to prepare the young people by implanting sense of cooperation but having a understanding of competition is as essential as former one. Emphasizing on both the attributes equally would make a great leader.
In today's world where everyone is fighting for higher position, there are many examples from which it can be suggested that striving to gain or win something could bring the best out of the person and lead to the better outcome for the industry or government for which person is working. As long as that hunger or the trait of competition doesn't hurt anyone, it could act as motivation for the person to work harder. For example, in the league of soccer, for a weak team to win the trophy they must have rivalry to the extent where they can beat the tough opposition with good margin and push themselves beyond their abilities and limits.
With the competition, needs of cooperation is also vital for the leader to draw out the compassion and feeling of trust in the people. Working together and to grow a mutual understanding would be encouraging. Understanding the needs of everyone and readiness to involve in every issue can grow immense confidence and trust in the people. For example, Henry Ford, the industrialist and founder of Ford motor company, is one such epitome of cooperative leader who solidified the industry revenue and growth through developing such quality. By changing the attitude towards their worker and giving a car to everyone as a gift triggered the emotions that they are center of concern and begun to work merrily and diligently. It's important for leader to not become conceited and supercilious.
Although with the sense of competition, excessive desire and crave for something could lead to strife or conflict where people might want to establish a superiority over others. In the fierce competition, people would want to destroy their opponents in order to take the gold chair of higher position. And that behavior could worsen the government and industry. Leader with condescending behavior would be threat to society and can arise to a vast number of hatred. And with that only one industry or person would be benefited.
So, blend of little competency with cooperation in mind would promote a finer and better leader from whom advancement of society can be predicted with certainty.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...lanting sense of cooperation but having a understanding of competition is as esse...
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Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...that hunger or the trait of competition doesnt hurt anyone, it could act as motivation...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'as for', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.261176470588 0.240241500013 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.145882352941 0.157235817809 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0658823529412 0.0880659088768 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0235294117647 0.0497285424764 47% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0258823529412 0.0444667217837 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.143529411765 0.12292977631 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0423529411765 0.0406280797675 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76942719395 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0423529411765 0.030933414821 137% => OK
Particles: 0.00235294117647 0.0016655270985 141% => OK
Determiners: 0.0917647058824 0.0997080785238 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0423529411765 0.0249443105267 170% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0164705882353 0.0148568991511 111% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2364.0 2732.02544248 87% => OK
No of words: 397.0 452.878318584 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.95465994962 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350125944584 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.251889168766 0.280924506359 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181360201511 0.200843997647 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125944584383 0.132149295362 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76942719395 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 219.290929204 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513853904282 0.48968727796 105% => OK
Word variations: 56.7192086519 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6194690265 82% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3529411765 23.380412469 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0692770677 59.4972553346 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.058823529 141.124799967 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 23.380412469 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.470588235294 0.674092028746 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 48.541858053 51.4728631049 94% => OK
Elegance: 2.28915662651 1.64882698954 139% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379641740849 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116311964382 0.123202303941 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0698420773533 0.077325440228 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.596786621324 0.547984918172 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179472666315 0.149214159877 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158309965293 0.161403998019 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882160703298 0.0892212321368 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.39304364768 0.385218514788 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.130581108844 0.0692045440612 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23739719708 0.275328986314 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853325852548 0.0653680567796 131% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.