With the fast develop of technology, our life is far more complex than the past. Many people concerned about our young people, and worried about their performance in this modern world. Many people think that young people should have the ability to plan and organise, and I am agree with this view. I would like to support this opinion by these following reasons.
The first reason is that young people will be more competitive in job market when they can make good plans and knows how to organise them. When people make a list about the things they should do, rather than straightly go ahead, they can finish them more efficiently. For example, a effective programmer will make a to-do list before writing codes. Since they think carefully about each step they should do, they will have less probability to make mistakes during this process. As a result, they can finish their job more clearly and wisely, of course, bosses will appreciate employees who is able to finish their tasks in a short time, so that those kind of employee will have high chance to get promotion and thus they are more competitive than the average.
Furthermore, plans makes people's life more enjoyable. Nowadays, most people suffer from great pressure during their life, so that everyone needs good relaxation to reduce stress. If people have a plan in their life, they can achieve the balance between work and relax. For instance, a good vocation plan with family is benefit for the relationships between parents and children. When people gain more happiness in life they can be more motivated in their job.
Finally, saving money is another benefit of planning. When people have a plan of what is they really need before they go shopping, they will have a higher probability to not spend money on the things they do not need, as a consequence, it helps people reduce their budget. If someone go to the shopping center and buy all the things which are attractive but not necessary, obviously he wasted a lot of money.
In conclusion, regarding to all of these benefits, having the ability to plan and organize not only make people competitive in market, but also improve people's life quality and reduce people's budget on unnecessary things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
... ability to plan and organise, and I am agree with this view. I would like to support...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ish them more efficiently. For example, a effective programmer will make a to-do ...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...sh their tasks in a short time, so that those kind of employee will have high chance to ge...
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Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tionships between parents and children. When people gain more happiness in life they...
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Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'goes'.
Suggestion: goes
... people reduce their budget. If someone go to the shopping center and buy all the ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'of course', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234597156398 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.154028436019 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0734597156398 0.0866891130778 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0616113744076 0.046263068375 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0687203791469 0.0685040099705 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116113744076 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0189573459716 0.0351676179071 54% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.41733696566 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0260663507109 0.0309702414327 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0781990521327 0.0887237588012 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0355450236967 0.0209618222197 170% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0189573459716 0.0139019557991 136% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2225.0 2387.08602151 93% => OK
No of words: 380.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85526315789 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.336842105263 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213157894737 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.131578947368 0.174417080927 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0973684210526 0.112833075102 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41733696566 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515789473684 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 56.2147940225 59.2087087015 95% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1111111111 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9518325176 48.84282405 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.611111111 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.644075263715 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 42.4269005848 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.3 1.45489161554 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340567233926 0.300154397459 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116964152301 0.103427244359 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0838853219852 0.0752933317313 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.528344727837 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179409370095 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129730700178 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708882946528 0.0781384742642 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.240985197739 0.336927656856 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0457195532367 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222366516702 0.210909579961 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592246173404 0.0618886996521 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.