Q Peoples character is influenced by environment rather than genetics Do you agree or disagree

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Q.....Peoples’ character is influenced by environment rather than genetics. Do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Jaswinder on Sat, 02/09/2013 - 06:07

In this rampant age of globalization, the existence of noble characters is mandatory to set the pillar of sincere locality. A central question remains whether the character of a person is shaped by environmenal conditions or genetics. Here, I would like to incline in the favour of statement.

To set in, there are numerous points endorsing my view. First and foremost, environment comprising type of educational standard, moral ehics given by parents including value of team spirit, co-operation, respectful behaviour towards pear groups, discipline, toiling hard as well as endorsement and behavi...

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Sentence: A central question remains whether the character of a person is shaped by environmenal conditions or genetics.
Error: environmenal Suggestion: environmental

Sentence: For example, unlike a child living in countryside, an offspring dwelling in a metro city is likely to be advanced, proactive, extrovert, frank and more attracted towards educational approches.
Error: approches Suggestion: approaches

Sentence: To illustrate, a child, whoes mind is like a blank paper, living in a family of terrorists is anticipated to be violent as his parents will install violent aggression after doing brainwash.
Error: whoes Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: As a result, his acts are given directions by atmosphere rather than genetics.
Error: acts Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: In a nutshell, after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations eith myself, I would like to assert that type of surroundings determine the character what it like be than genetics.
Error: eith Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 316 350
No. of Characters: 1567 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.216 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.959 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.949 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.694 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Ohhhh ..i was expecting 7.0+
But its unfortunate
What things could I improve to get 7.0+ in this essay..????
And are my ideas perfect or not ????
I m in dilemma

Well, the E-rater only gave 6.0 because of spelling errors and Sentence-Sentence Coherence (which is low: 0.037). We gave it 7.5 because of the overall performance.

The final mark =(E-rater+human grader)/2, which is around 6.7.

There are no problem for essay ideas.

We too think this essay is 7.0+ . We will explore why the Sentence-Sentence Coherence is very low for this essay by E-rater.

May I know what do u mean by this evalution more clearly...

No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0

'No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20' means there are 45 words which are greater than 8 chars in this essay. for example: deliberations,countryside,offspring. While 20 means the ideal number of words which are greater than 8 chars.

Same meaning to No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80 and No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40.

Passive sentences can get you into trouble in academic writing because they can be vague about who is responsible for the action. A higher count of passive voice markers may lead to a lower score, so we set the ideal number of Passive Voice(%) to 0. However, this doesn't mean you can't use Passive sentences. All sentence varieties will lead to more credits.