In this memo, the director of student housing at Buckingham College concludes that Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories in order to serve the housing needs of its students. To support this recommendation, the author points out that the existed dormitory space is not sufficient to serve the students that will be likely doubled after 50 years and recently, the average of renting rate for an apartment in its town has increased. Further the author also claims that new dormitories would make have a positive influence on the enrollment at Buckingham College. This recommendation is flawed in tenuous reasoning.
Basically, the author hastily assumes that the inclination of the increase its students today never change after 50 years. It might be the case, however, it is possible that the number of students would be reduced in next year or later by some reasons, such as competitive colleges of Buckingham College can attract more students than the college which can result to the decrease of its number of students. Moreover, perhaps there could be a critical financial problem in Buckingham College which can be a reason to reduce its students. If these cases are true, this recommendation is controversial as it stands.
Secondly, even if we concede that the increase of the number of students will continue for 50 years, this recommendation is also problematic in that it assures that new coming students at Buckingham College should live in its dormitory. Few of them will want to live in the dorm, however, there is a possibility that many of them want to commute to the college because their houses are located near by the college, or to live in an apartment because of their personal preferences. Without ruling out these possibilities, this recommendation also cannot be convincing.
Lastly, stating that the average rate in renting for an apartment in the town has increased, this recommendation has an appropriate assumption that the residents of those apartments in the town are only the students of Buckingham College. Even though the students who live in the apartments would rise the average rent, it can be possible that the students cannot be significant to influence on the average rent because a group of others who are not the students is much larger than the students’ group. If this possibility is true, we cannot evaluate this recommendation properly.
To sum, this recommendation is immature and fragile as it stands. To make it better, the author should inform that the increase of the students should be unchanged in the future, and that sufficiently large members of the students will live in the dorm. To make it tenable, we also need to know that the increased average rent for an apartment is caused by the increased the number of students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...ollege because their houses are located near by the college, or to live in an apartment...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... of the students will live in the dorm. To make it tenable, we also need to know t...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225048923679 0.25644967241 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.148727984344 0.15541462614 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0684931506849 0.0836205057962 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0508806262231 0.0520304965353 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.041095890411 0.0272364105082 151% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.150684931507 0.125424944231 120% => OK
Participles: 0.027397260274 0.0416121511921 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94132390046 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027397260274 0.026700313972 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00391389432485 0.001811407834 216% => OK
Determiners: 0.133072407045 0.113004496875 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0391389432485 0.0255425247493 153% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00978473581213 0.0127820249294 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2807.0 2731.13054187 103% => OK
No of words: 465.0 446.07635468 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03655913978 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372043010753 0.378187486979 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.296774193548 0.287650121315 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202150537634 0.208842608468 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131182795699 0.135150697306 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94132390046 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 207.018472906 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406451612903 0.469332199767 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.9037585308 52.1807786196 86% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 27.3529411765 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.9474723094 57.7814097925 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.117647059 141.986410481 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3529411765 23.2022227129 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.724660767414 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 57.0303605313 51.9672348444 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.67479674797 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399009498854 0.441005458295 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130194802999 0.135418324435 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.106937605734 0.0829849096947 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.565178418337 0.58762219726 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.237658035101 0.147661913831 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17234052888 0.193483328276 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11210945411 0.0970749176394 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.531274599803 0.42659136922 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0562529317308 0.0774707102158 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299200098854 0.312017818177 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597220807337 0.0698173142475 86% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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