Technology is making today's people less creative than any other time in history. Is this sentence right?
Some people disagree with this idea especially children. I strongly agree with this idea because I can see how it deteriorate my children's ability.
First of all, I can not tell them anything to do, especially my son when it comes to the grass I am the only person who loan the grass and nobody is there to help me. Everybody in school is studying and I am the only one who fails and this is his excuse. I have to show ell during winter time when I am freezing.
Moreover, they pay with the play station and they tell me they are studying . So they became lazy by the help of technology. For instance my children, they do not do their bed. They become lazy by this technology.
Furthermore, I am the person who buys first brand technology and smart phone for them. Especially, smartphones that are changing everyday. Everyday the newer one appear.Laptop today apple is the brand they want, so I have to buy them.
In summary, I strongly believe technology is disruptive for my children at least. Because they do not help me,study and they want more money from me to buy new technology devices.
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Essay evaluation report
how it deteriorate my children's ability.
how it deteriorates my children's ability.
flaws:
No. of Words: 218 350 //Minimum 250 words wanted.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 16 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 218 350
No. of Characters: 954 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.843 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.376 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.407 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.347 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ht? Some people disagree with this idea especially children. I strongly agree wi...
^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'deteriorates'?
Suggestion: deteriorates
...with this idea because I can see how it deteriorate my childrens ability. First of all, ...
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Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ation and they tell me they are studying . So they became lazy by the help of tech...
^^
Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...pecially, smartphones that are changing everyday. Everyday the newer one appear.Laptop t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...smartphones that are changing everyday. Everyday the newer one appear.Laptop today apple...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 170, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Laptop
...everyday. Everyday the newer one appear.Laptop today apple is the brand they want, so ...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 110, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , study
...en at least. Because they do not help me,study and they want more money from me to buy...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'furthermore', 'moreover', 'so', 'at least', 'for instance', 'in summary', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206611570248 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.181818181818 0.158761421928 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0661157024793 0.0866891130778 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0537190082645 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.140495867769 0.0685040099705 205% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0826446280992 0.118717715034 70% => OK
Participles: 0.0206611570248 0.0351676179071 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58339221795 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0247933884298 0.0309702414327 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0702479338843 0.0887237588012 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00826446280992 0.0209618222197 39% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0289256198347 0.0139019557991 208% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1210.0 2387.08602151 51% => OK
No of words: 217.0 408.028673835 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57603686636 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.48200974243 86% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.26267281106 0.338922669872 78% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.198156682028 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175115207373 0.174417080927 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0967741935484 0.112833075102 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58339221795 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 212.727598566 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562211981567 0.524397521467 107% => OK
Word variations: 52.9039353638 59.2087087015 89% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 13.5625 20.5533526081 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2003008526 48.84282405 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.625 120.699889404 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5625 20.5533526081 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 33.3781682028 45.7405998639 73% => OK
Elegance: 0.824175824176 1.45489161554 57% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266948034342 0.300154397459 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0858841414512 0.103427244359 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0692412313398 0.0752933317313 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.5917426352 0.497263757937 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149266875923 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914783566781 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488011421588 0.0781384742642 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.116876819902 0.336927656856 35% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0468830833641 0.067059652881 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138850178694 0.210909579961 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385530624517 0.0618886996521 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8870967742 59% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.