The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
If you ask your friends which country they think is a great nation, they probably will give you different answers for their own convinced reasons. With the indicators of a great nation, depending on which area or field one look at, he will have his own believed ones in mind. It could be the achievements of the rulers, artists, or scientists. It could also be the general welfare of its people. However, the statement completely denies the former and overemphasizes the significance of the latter. I therefore disagree with the claim.
The achievements of certain elites could indicate a great nation for some people. Very often, people have their own interest or goals. If a country can help achieve their objectives, it will be a great nation for them. One may think Egypt is a great nation because of its archaeological value. One may believe Germany is a great nation because of its free colleges. One may advocate Japan is a great nation because of its animation culture. These reasons for crediting a country a great nation are equally important. At the same time, none of them is the surest indicator.
Similarly, the general welfare of its people may be not as good; still, it could be considered great, due to its comprehensive strength. Take China for instance. It only spends approximately twelve percent of its GDP on welfare, has the tightest restraints regarding using the internet, and has put people’s health and environment at a great risk because of the pollution. The general welfare of its people is therefore not plausible.
However, the weakness of its welfare does not stop some people from considering it as a great nation for the following reasons. According to U.S.News, China is the third most powerful country in the world, and has the world second-largest economy, right after in the United States. In addition, China is a member of several regional and international organizations. For example, since 1971 it has been a permanent member of the United Nations Security Council. Its global influence has rapidly grown. Moreover, based on the data from the Journalist’s Resource, China has taken a major role in world science and technology. As we can see, despite the unnotable welfare condition, China has displayed many other qualities for people to admit its greatness.
Moreover, though a nation takes a good care of its people in general, it will unlikely be considered great by everyone. For example, many people believe the United States is a great nation due to the good welfare of its people: it protects people’s human rights, respects their beliefs, promotes individuals to succeed, and meet their cultural needs. However, some people refuse to believe so because of its gun abuse and racial problems. So, a nation who has the best welfare is not necessarily a great nation to some people.
In conclusion, what indicates a great nation is indeed a subjective question. Depending on what people value, both the achievements of its rulers, scientists, or artists and the general welfare of its people could be the indicators to some people. Yet none of them is the surest indicator for everyone, I thus disagree with the claim.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The second paragraph is like an introduction paragraph too. and this writing style can't apply to other issue essays.
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There is a 'pattern' which may help you in the future writing for issue essays. and it can help how to outline issue essays. We call it TLPE:
T means Time: put the argument on a history background to check out it is correct or not. for example, China is up and down in the history, but no body can deny it is a great nation since it is the only nation with continuous civilizations in this world and a lot of inventions.
L means Location: test the argument on different locations/countries/regions. for example, some countries have good well fare because of its locations like those nations have oils. or have good well fare systems already , like those north European countries.
P means People: test the argument on people. for example, some nations' good or bad really depends on some specific rulers. After those rulers died or get down, the good well fare are gone too...
E means Event: Some people may argue (in some events...) ...however, still I support ... //like your fourth and fifth paragraph.
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this user:
http://www.testbig.com/users/ayush
as he told he wrote 4 arguments first, and then go back for introduction and conclusion. and he got 5.5 out of 6.
You don't necessary develop 4 arguments, 3 arguments are enough. but TLPE can help find the ideas quickly.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 532 350
No. of Characters: 2558 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.803 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.808 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.676 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.777 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...at nation because of its free colleges. One may advocate Japan is a great nation be...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: News
...the following reasons. According to U.S.News, China is the third most powerful count...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'second', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'third', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in general']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.241435562806 0.240241500013 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.122349102773 0.157235817809 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0995106035889 0.0880659088768 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047308319739 0.0497285424764 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0701468189233 0.0444667217837 158% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10766721044 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.026101141925 0.0406280797675 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86157688793 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0130505709625 0.030933414821 42% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10277324633 0.0997080785238 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0244698205546 0.0249443105267 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00815660685155 0.0148568991511 55% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3198.0 2732.02544248 117% => OK
No of words: 530.0 452.878318584 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03396226415 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.383018867925 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.284905660377 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190566037736 0.200843997647 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130188679245 0.132149295362 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86157688793 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 219.290929204 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462264150943 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.0711782137 55.4138127331 98% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6194690265 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5625 23.380412469 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9386713514 59.4972553346 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9375 141.124799967 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5625 23.380412469 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.59375 0.674092028746 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 45.0530660377 51.4728631049 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.56462585034 1.64882698954 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.610826201689 0.391690518653 156% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12372044964 0.123202303941 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.110366556366 0.077325440228 143% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.488047405625 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160999997215 0.149214159877 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.210795564404 0.161403998019 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124045203564 0.0892212321368 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407712813362 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0462952709305 0.0692045440612 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.422297805777 0.275328986314 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959844662176 0.0653680567796 147% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.4325221239 201% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 18.0 7.22455752212 249% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.