"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
In this letter the town council is asked to limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. To support this recommendation the writer points out that that similar reduction in number of mopeds being rented led to a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents last year. This argument rests on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
Firstly, the writer omits the consideration that it is not necessary if the neighboring island of seaville has achieved reduction in accidents by implementing the above said restrictions, the balmer island also obtain the same result. The roads of the seaville island may be narrow that cannot accomodate large number of mopeds. It can also happen that the population of the balmer island is higher and reduction in number of mopeds may lead to problem in functioning of routine system.
Secondly, the author doesn't addresses the issue that every time it is not necessary that the reason behind the accidents is moped only, it may also happen that the pedestrians may encroach into the road space and this may cause accidents. This can happen, may be due to the large amount of people walking besides the road.
Thirdly, The argument assumes that all the accidents are done by the hired mopeds. what if they are done by the private owned vehicles, the restriction will has no logic then. If they reduce the number of hired moped it will lead to an increase of car users which will affect the traffic and may cause more pollution also.
In conclusion, to persuade me that the council should adopt those restrictions the author should get proper evidences in support of it. The author should also provide proper data regarding the accidents in balmer island.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 160, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. To support this recommendation the wri...
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Line 4, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...accidents are done by the hired mopeds. what if they are done by the private owned v...
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Line 4, column 317, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...he traffic and may cause more pollution also. In conclusion, to persuade me that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 309.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91909385113 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69305447227 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508090614887 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9678843793 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.923076923 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 5.70786347227 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290620977378 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974779184866 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804858524384 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146324364091 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729140830766 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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