Tpo44
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
These days most of parents go to work and they don’t have enough time to spend with their children. So they have to plan for their short time to do with children’s school work or play games and sport.
In my opinion busy parents should use that time to have fun with their children for many reasons.
First, psychologically parents should participate in their children’s plays to show them that they are important for them. For example when father plays soccer with his son, the boy thinks that his father considered him as a valuable person in his life. So it has benefit for the boy’s personality. It raises his self-confidence.
Second, in this way children and parents relationship becomes better. They are going match each other. In this case they can be like friends instead of parents and children and also it has some benefits for parents. For example when a boy feels sad about something happened in his school, the first step is coming to his parents and tell them otherwise if they were not friends it can caused so many problems for them.
Third, as we know children can do their schoolwork with their friends and also teachers. Because in some schools, students can do their school work after school hours. It can be enjoyable for students because teacher will be there and will be help them easily. For example if the student didn’t understand something in his lesson he can ask his teacher immediately. But imagine if that boy asks that problem his father and he doesn’t know completely, they waste their time. So by this way parents and children can save they time and get a perfect conclusion.
To sum up, parents should spend some of their time with their children to play with them and help them in their school work. Although some parents are busy and don’t have enough time to do both, the preference is playing with them to have positive influence on their children. It helps their children to have good personality in their future lives and will raise their self -confidence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 12, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the parents') or simply say ''most parents''.
Suggestion: most of the parents; most parents
...o approaches do you prefer? These days most of parents go to work and they don't have eno...
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Line 6, column 385, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...herwise if they were not friends it can caused so many problems for them. Third, as w...
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Line 8, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r future lives and will raise their self confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, third, for example, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72815533981 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49282125122 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436893203883 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9994697739 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6956521739 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9130434783 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39130434783 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413509004561 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149497657273 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179319883759 0.0737576698707 243% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278644296514 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.221833701885 0.0645574589148 344% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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