Living in contemporary time is very different from living in the ancient time. Nowadays, people must consider a wide variety of factors in their lives. I am of the conviction that one of these factors is having the ability to plan and organize, because of following reasons.
First, I believe that people, specially in teen period of their life, must know how to make a plan in order to secure their educations. In other sense, people are in a trap by all surroundong technology and if they do not prevent their minds from spending time on new technologies, they would have no time to study or focusing on their educations. As a result, they have to forget all about their future universities or dream jobs. For instance, nowadays all the teenagers have smartphones and most of them lost the track of time when they are in the Instagram or facebook, because these applications are extremely attractive.
In addition, I think that if people are not strong enough to have the organizing ability, they would easily be decieved by advertising and due to that they are going to spend their all money on purchasing unnecessary products. Hence, people could not save their money in order to acheive their goals in life, because they can not organize their financial schedules. For example, once in a trip, I went to markets without having a requirement list and I bought lots of things irrelevant to my needs and I came back to my hotel unpleasant.
Last but not the least, I advocate that people during their life advantures must have the ability to make a schedule in order to overcome the vicissitudes of life. When we make a decision in our mind we must know how to devision our goals'path into smaller steps to successfully reach them. On the contrary, if we do not have plan, we defenitly would lost our track and on the middle of the path we abandon our goals and follow a new one. And as a consequences, we become a person that just knows a little thing in tremendous subjects, but is not an expert in all of them. Hence, we put non of them in our resume in order to hire in a job.
To sum up, I am of the conviction that having the ability to make a plan is really essential, because it directly affect our education, financial plans and future jobs.
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Essay evaluation report
how to devision our goals'path
how to divide our goals'path
Sentence: In other sense, people are in a trap by all surroundong technology and if they do not prevent their minds from spending time on new technologies, they would have no time to study or focusing on their educations.
Error: surroundong Suggestion: surrounding
Sentence: In addition, I think that if people are not strong enough to have the organizing ability, they would easily be decieved by advertising and due to that they are going to spend their all money on purchasing unnecessary products.
Error: decieved Suggestion: deceived
Sentence: Hence, people could not save their money in order to acheive their goals in life, because they can not organize their financial schedules.
Error: acheive Suggestion: achieve
Sentence: Last but not the least, I advocate that people during their life advantures must have the ability to make a schedule in order to overcome the vicissitudes of life.
Error: advantures Suggestion: adventures
Sentence: When we make a decision in our mind we must know how to devision our goals'path into smaller steps to successfully reach them.
Error: devision Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: On the contrary, if we do not have plan, we defenitly would lost our track and on the middle of the path we abandon our goals and follow a new one.
Error: defenitly Suggestion: definitely
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence. Look:
if
we do not have plan,
we defenitly would lost our track and on the middle of the path
we abandon our goals and follow a new one. And as a consequences,
we become a person that just knows a little thing in tremendous subjects, but is not an expert in all of them. Hence,
we put non of them in our resume in order to hire in a job.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1801 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.425 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.552 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.093 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng in the ancient time. Nowadays, people must consider a wide variety of factors ...
^^
Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r to overcome the vicissitudes of life. When we make a decision in our mind we must ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...hem. On the contrary, if we do not have plan, we defenitly would lost our track and ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 351, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...we do not have plan, we defenitly would lost our track and on the middle of the path...
^^^^
Line 7, column 446, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consequence' or simply 'consequences'?
Suggestion: a consequence; consequences
... our goals and follow a new one. And as a consequences, we become a person that just knows a l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 115, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...s really essential, because it directly affect our education, financial plans and futu...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, really, so, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5763546798 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66196796197 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485221674877 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0092660414 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.125 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164937662574 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613017527752 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550429100395 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106308224002 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300358330463 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.