There is, in today's world, an increased production of computer games. The author posits that computer games are full of waste and should be proscribed for kids. And, i agree with the author due to several reasons.
In starting with, computer games, due to relentless use of computer games, causes the kids to become irresponsible. When I was in my uncle house one year's ago, my cousin, who is a 10 years old kids, was obsessed by the game GTA vice city. So, he was unable to complete his assignment, perform better in his classes which caused deterioration of his study. Futher more, the continuous playing of game lead to health effect such as impairment of eyesight, headache. My cousin, further suffered from myopia. My uncle, as a result, banned a use of computer.
The use of computer games, unlike other physical game- football, basket ball, cricket, have not any health benefit, rather i degrade health condition. Some the computer games are so violent or profligate that kids have an notion to fight or quarrel and behave in unwholesome way. In my neighborhood, there was a kids. He was so absorbed by a flying game, that he plunge from a roof of his house. He, fortunately, survived, having severe leg injury.
Making kids accustomed to computer games encourage kids to play further highly sophisticated games, which requires high graphics. They, due to this, urge their parents to buy costly computer, causing them economic burden. My brother always used to harp my mother to add graphics or to buy new computer so he could play a newly released game far cry. And, the only cost of adding new graphics to old computer was about 40% of my father income.
Thus, because it cause multiple impact on children- obsession, health impairment and financial burden,the use of computer games should be avoided for children
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, thus, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90032154341 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63167516376 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610932475884 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5464073364 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2105263158 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3684210526 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.57894736842 5.45110844103 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155912953364 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485072036141 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044809829698 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102586851545 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363432433177 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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