The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

The line charts illustrate the number of men and women Freedonia workers in six different sectors between 1975 and 1995.

Non-defense public sector became the job for the majority of males in both 1975 and 1995. It became the main job for most females in 1975 as well, however, wholesale & retail trade sector dominated instead among women in 1995.

The numbers of men and women in non-defence public sector were well over 800,000 and 600,000 respectively for two decades. Meanwhile, wholesale & retail trade sector had the second most workers for men (about 700,000) and women (around 550,000) in the first period. Surprisingly, while the number of male workers remained unchanged, the number of female workers dramatically rose to almost 800,000 over a couple of decades.

Interestingly, communication and finance/banking sectors were highly unpopular among women in 1975 with less than 300,000 workers. However the figures sharply climbed in two decades; the former became half a million, while the latter became over 400,000. Nevertheless, the number of male workers in those sectors remained unchanged for twenty years (300,000 and just below 500,000 respectively).

Manufacturing was the third most popular men jobs in both periods (over 600,000), however, the figure in those periods were only its half in females. Defence public sector was the least popular throughout the time with below 300,000 workers in both sexes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
... and women in non-defence public sector were well over 800,000 and 600,000 respectiv...
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Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...in 1975 with less than 300,000 workers. However the figures sharply climbed in two deca...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 128, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
..., the figure in those periods were only its half in females. Defence public sector ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, third, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1206.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 224.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38392857143 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67904916138 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522321428571 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 348.3 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 18.201353142 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.636363636 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214248537521 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106517368793 0.103423049105 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694134222805 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145440293524 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585087238522 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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