People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
External factors can effect on individuals personality and help the characters' formation. Every society consists of different individuals and every individual make a smaller society and effect themselves. Existence of some rules in every society is vital and effect on the progresses and the existence of that society. Even though some people haven't any attention to some rules and more try to do some works by their own. Also external factors is not only making laws and may be societies people's behavior together can determine peoples' character.
It might be true that, society, peers, rules, schools,universities, environment have a severe effect on people's behavior and is highly justified to say that external factors are solely responsible for the behavior of the people. Rule's society have an important role on people's behavior and prohibit them to do illegal act. For instance kidnapping is illegal and it make people don't do it and if they Commit such an offense should be punished like 6-months prison or even some same punishments.
So They do not dare to do these crime. It may be different rules in different society like putting garbage after 9 o'clock at night in japan is has reprimand but in other society it doesn't. Hence making laws in the society can effect on people's behavior. We have to admit that, universities and some other educational institutions have a key role on the formation of personality and navigate individuals to one side. It could be imagined that, environment has more effect on people's life than something else such as family. Environment's effect is more severe than family due to, environment is larger than family and allocate more population than family and even an external environment due to its power can adapt different cultures with itself, however we are not the witness of these things in a family.
With all that said, people's behavior can not be determined by external forces. Proponent people in every society believe that every people have personal will and he/she can control him/herself. Even without of any rules in a society every person can recognize what is right or wrong and make a decision by its will. So people's behavior can not be influenced by external forces due to their personal's will. The power of thought in human cause him/her to make decision by him/her will. Individuals with different cultures in a society have different attitudes to society and show different reactions. It can be referred to their personal's will. For instance a person with religious attitude and the existence of some traditions in its mind, can not be influenced by different beliefs.
Additionally, kind of training in smaller society like family can help peoples to have a stable and right perception from external environment and be less influenced by external environment and think better. Moreover lack of any pressure in a society in every field people's life can help them to be less influenced by external environment and individual's personal will in these field be more bold.
Consequently, people's behavior can not be determined by external environment and every people have different perception to the society and their attitudes to the society can be effected by their own will and external factors can not effect on the people's attitudes because of their behavior formation in their families.
- "The best way to teach-whether as an educator, employer, or parent-is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones." 50
- "It is often asserted that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. In reality, however, formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free." 58
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. 50
- A school or college should pay its teachers at the same rate in all disciplines, regardless of differences in salaries for related fields in the world outside of school. For example, entry-level teachers in mathematics and in the arts should receive the s 58
- In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
External factors can effect on individuals personality and help the characters for...
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Line 1, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'characters'' or 'character's'?
Suggestion: characters'; character's
...on individuals personality and help the characters formation. Every society consists of di...
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Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...f that society. Even though some people havent any attention to some rules and more tr...
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Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...more try to do some works by their own. Also external factors is not only making law...
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Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , universities
...rue that, society, peers, rules, schools,universities, environment have a severe effect on pe...
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Line 2, column 365, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...r instance kidnapping is illegal and it make people dont do it and if they Commit su...
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Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...idnapping is illegal and it make people dont do it and if they Commit such an offens...
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Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this crime' or 'these crimes'?
Suggestion: this crime; these crimes
...punishments. So They do not dare to do these crime. It may be different rules in different...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...nt society like putting garbage after 9 oclock at night in japan is has reprimand but ...
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Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'reprimanded'.
Suggestion: reprimanded
...after 9 oclock at night in japan is has reprimand but in other society it doesnt. Hence m...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s has reprimand but in other society it doesnt. Hence making laws in the society can e...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...primand but in other society it doesnt. Hence making laws in the society can effect o...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ironment has more effect on peoples life than something else such as family. Envi...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... external environment and think better. Moreover lack of any pressure in a society in ev...
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Line 6, column 234, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...r own will and external factors can not effect on the peoples attitudes because of the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, even so, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2807.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0943738657 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83317094773 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.375680580762 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 924.3 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3584322858 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.28 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.04 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174587579862 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675011391703 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837394759926 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125060178677 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840749740934 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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