Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the challenging section for the government is where assign the country budgets in order to causes the best results for the future. The arguments is whether focusing on the education of very young children or on universities. I believe that because of following reasons, the governments must spend budgets on the universities.
To begin with, I advocate that the youth is making the universities' population, and these persons have considered seriously their own lives recently. As a results, they would appreciate the government consideration more than little kids. In fact, the kids do not realize the significant meaning beyond of the government consideration because playing is the only thing that is matter for them in the initiated ages.
In addition, I claim that the universities' facilities must be enhanced by the governments, due to the fact that the youth are the future of the society and they will fill all job positions. Hence, the government must provide them advanced educational tools for better studying. Also, the universities must be supplied by entertainment budgets that students could utilize for healthy mind. I must mentions that the youth will be parents of the kids, so if they have supportive jobs, kids would be affected as well.
Last but not the least, I think that these are the graduated students who build fundamentals of the country economic. Due to that, the governments have to provide extended job positions for them and reduce the competition between them for achieving careers. On the other hand, the kids are just consumers and have no benefit for the country right now.
To sum up, I am of the conviction that the government must focus on the students because they take lives more seriously, they need better education for building future and they will build economic of the country.
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Essay evaluation report
One of the challenging section for the government is where assign the country budgets in order to causes the best results
One of the challenging sections for the government is where to assign the country's budgets in order to cause the best results //one of nouns
The arguments is whether focusing on the education of very young children or on universities.
The arguments is whether to focus on the education of very young children or on universities.
Sentence: In addition, I claim that the universities' facilities must be enhanced by the governments, due to the fact that the youth are the future of the society and they will fill all job positions.
Description: The fragment that the youth is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
is the only thing that is matter for them in the initiated ages.
is the only thing that matters for them in the initiated ages.
Sentence: I must mentions that the youth will be parents of the kids, so if they have supportive jobs, kids would be affected as well.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to must and mentions
Sentence: Last but not the least, I think that these are the graduated students who build fundamentals of the country economic.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to country and economic
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Different Words: 152 200 //memorize more words
Don't need those transition words like: 'I believe', 'I think', 'I claim'...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 303 350
No. of Characters: 1494 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.931 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.776 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.441 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...t results for the future. The arguments is whether focusing on the education of ve...
^^
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'universities'' or 'university's'?
Suggestion: universities'; university's
...I advocate that the youth is making the universities population, and these persons have cons...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
... seriously their own lives recently. As a results, they would appreciate the government c...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, well, i think, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08250825083 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83933513418 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521452145215 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4981446677 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202267049754 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076878654114 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057511585714 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120795266593 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692090595064 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.