Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Submitted by blue_sky on Sat, 03/02/2013 - 12:41

It is true that sports stars earn huge salaries. While there are some reasons why this is the case, I personally believe that it is wrong for these people to be paid more than other professionals.

Some people believe that sports professionals earn too much money. They argue that sport is a form of entertainment rather than a vital service. We could easily live without sportspeople, yet other professionals who contribute much more to society are undervalued and underpaid. For example, football players can earn enormous salaries by simply kicking a ball, while nurses, teachers and doctors earn a fraction of the money despite being essential for our health and prosperity. From this perspective, sports stars do not deserve the salaries they currently earn.

On the other hand, it is fair that the best sports professionals earn a lot of money. There are several reasons why they receive a considerable amount of salary. One is that being a top sportsperson requires hours of practice to developing their skills and fitness and only the most talented among them reach the top. Another reason is that sport is multi-million-pound industry and sports on television attract many viewers. There is also a large audience of sports fans who are willing to pay to support their teams. From this view, It is easy to say that they can expect high salaries.

In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against the salaries paid to the sports stars, but I believe that they should not be paid more than other professionals who are contributing much more to our society.

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Don't put your opinion in the first paragraph. It is repetitive to talk at the first paragraph and last paragraph both. You just need to generally talk both views in the first paragraph.

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Score: 4.5 out of 9
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I don't believe its a band 4.5 essay.
I think, you guys have lack of knowledge about the judgement procedure of IELTS essay.
If you use software then try it should process IELTS specific things..not generalize one.

We are so sorry to make your angry because of the essay mark.

Overall your IELTS level is around 6.0 to 6.5 from other essays we evaluated before.

For this essay, we gave it 4.5 mainly mainly because of the structure and organization of the essay as we mentioned above.

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