When it comes to consider if the use of cars in twenty years, the overwhelming majority would support that there will be fewer cars than today. However, the others take the opposite attitude and assume that the use of cars will be as much as today. As far as I’m concerned, decreased car use is more reasonable.
First of all, the development of alternate transportation will cause a negative impact on car usage. Mass transit today is a lot more developed and convenient than it was twenty years ago. It is possible for public transportation in twenty years being even advanced than today. Moreover, security will be another advantage of mass transit compared to cars. For example, I always choose to take a bus rather than driving my own car as the result of the extreme weather in Canada. The increase of public transportation will consequentially lead to the decline of car use.
Secondly, limited parking lot is another reason that people give up their car. Parking cars is headache-caused problem to any manager of shopping malls or other institutions for entertainment. These popular places are always running out of parking lots when weekends or holidays come. It happens all the time that costumers have to park their cars a thousand mile away due to the shortage of the parking lots. Once they park at a place where parking is forbidden, tickets from policeman cost them a lot. So, more and more people will give up their cars and choose alternate transportation to save time and money, not to mention the latter is becoming increasing convenient.
Last but not least, global warming has received additional attention recently, forcing the public to face the environment problem. The carbon dioxide released from the car has negative impact on environment and need to be reduced. Less carbon dioxide means less car running on the road. Unless scientists find the way to control the environmental contamination, government will compel people to cut down their use of cars. For instance, the advertisements on televisions advise us to take more mass transit instead of driving more cars. People’s awareness of environmental protection urge the reduce the cars.
To wrap up, the use of cars will shrink in twenty years because of the development of public transportation, parking difficulty and the attempt to protect the environment.
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Essay evaluation report
When it comes to consider if the use of cars in twenty years,
When it comes to consider the use of cars in twenty years,
When it comes to consider whether the use of cars in twenty years will be fewer or not,
is becoming increasing convenient.
is becoming increasingly convenient.
People’s awareness of environmental protection urge the reduce the cars.
People’s awareness of environmental protection urges to reduce the cars.
People’s awareness of environmental protection urges reducing the cars.
flaws:
The introduction is wordy. better to be simpler:
When it comes to consider the use of cars in twenty years, the overwhelming majority would support that there will be fewer cars than there are today. However, others may take the opposite attitude. As far as I’m concerned, decreased car use is more reasonable.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1911 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.9 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.864 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.344 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to alternate'
Suggestion: to alternate
...ople will give up their cars and choose alternate transportation to save time and money, ...
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Line 7, column 595, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...reness of environmental protection urge the reduce the cars. To wrap up, the use of ca...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0822622108 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9448644436 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529562982005 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.8331448045 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8636363636 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6818181818 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215594557845 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708932267937 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686515837371 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143480619604 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854629037931 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.