I strongly believe that, in compared with older people, the youth are more inspired from celebrities, because of imitation, having more time and being inexperienced.
First of all, the youth are often looking forward for the high social status. In my opinion, since famous people possess higher prestige, earn higher salaries and are always major subjects in magazines and newspaper, it gives the younger individuals enough reasons to follow their lifestyle regularly. In other words, celebrities are symbol of success, wealth and happiness for the youth, and as a result, they try to imitate from them more than older people.
In addition, owing to the rapid development in technology, the news about super stars and famous entertainers are mainly spread via the internet and since, teenagers have more free time, these kinds of news will be more interesting for them and try to spend several hours in the net in order to read their celebrities' opinions. Unlike the youth, the older people have to work very hard and do not have enough time, so it is not very important for them to follow these news.
Moreover, I believe that the younger people are likely to be influenced by other famous individuals due to lack of experience in their lives. Nowadays, the media tend to report the fashion lifestyle of celebrities, which appear to be quite attractive to youth. Since they are inexperienced, they do not find out that all those expensive clothes are just as an advertisement and try behave like them. In contrast, because the older people have enough experience in their lives, they know that the real life of celebrities is not like that and as a result, it is not interesting for them to follow the opinions of super stars.
To summarize, I conclude that the younger people are more interested to follow the celebrities rather than older ones, because they have more free time, less experience and tend to mimic their lifestyles.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ate from them more than older people. In addition, owing to the rapid developmen...
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Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this news' or 'these newses'?
Suggestion: this news; these newses
...s not very important for them to follow these news. Moreover, I believe that the younger ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so, in addition, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94478527607 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64570863341 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503067484663 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2075663006 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.545454545 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6363636364 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2727272727 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223295392035 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899946042148 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477079687259 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139215963154 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233774863842 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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