In order to pursue life in a consistent manner, financial matter plays an important role along with other(behavior, good career, spiritual satisfaction). So there is always an argument whether to involve person,in a young age, in financial responsible activity for making them responsible adults. I, in my opinion, believe that children should be made involved, in management of their money, at early age due to following basic reason.
At first, they will know the worth of the money. For instance, When I was child, around age 13, my parents, mostly being busy at their job , were unable to look after my financial need- for buying study material, paying my tuition fee- so intently. That's why they used to give a specific amount of considerable amount of money and I have to take care of these material by myself. During that period of time, by step by step, I learned the financial worth of object since I used to use them wisely and if I did any extravagant expenditure, I had to ask from my parents, which made them angry and used to rant me. So, then I had to be frugal during at any financial activity. Thus, that frugal behavior have made me economical at my recent age also, which is a very healthy habit.
Second, involving at little age will add experience to be frugal, during an early age. If a child is given to manage money at early age, since the early age, they may build any idea of using money wisely, which may make them using a money wisely as a facile activity during the adults. For example, My cousin, at an early age, was a spendthrift since his parents were pampering him, but as he became older and older, his behavior was same but his parents cannot provide him money in a similar manner as past because older person require higher money than young. So he had a problem for managing money; however for me it was ease since I was economical since I have learned to be frugal since early.
Third, it will help them to be involved in certain type of economical activity since beginning. If they are allowed to manage their own money at early age, they will be searching or engaged in certain part time job. Thus,it will help them to reduce the financial burden of family and also know the wroth of money because they will know that money are the product of their labor, which is a significant value that will be instill in them since early age.
Finally, since the involvement of person in frugal economic activity at young age will aid them to become a financially responsible adult at future by various ways- acknowledgment of value of money, engagement in financial activity since early age, and instillation of economical behavior. Therefore, children should learn to manage their money at young age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a consistent manner" with adverb for "consistent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
In order to pursue life in a consistent manner, financial matter plays an important ro...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... parents, mostly being busy at their job , were unable to look after my financial ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...al, paying my tuition fee- so intently. Thats why they used to give a specific amount...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...f these material by myself. During that period of time, by step by step, I learned the financi...
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'by step'.
Suggestion: by step
... by myself. During that period of time, by step by step, I learned the financial worth of objec...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a similar manner" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ut his parents cannot provide him money in a similar manner as past because older person require hi...
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Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...will be searching or engaged in certain part time job. Thus,it will help them to reduce t...
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Suggestion: , it
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to reduce the financial burden of family and also know the wroth of money because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 483.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68115942029 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53194449937 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482401656315 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7124240398 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.611111111 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261114428437 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107657311162 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079835347767 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183767727887 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751047702102 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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