In general, life today is much easier and more comfortable than it was when our 40 years ago due to the development of technology. My grandpa always says that our generation possess a lot more opportunities than that of his age. The reasons are as follows.
First of all, the invention of the Internet bring us to an unprecedented and unpredictable situation. It enables us to access resource that is unavailable previously. Almost everything is available electronically if you search it on the Internet, for instance, once my grandfather wanted to find some books, after 30 minutes’ walking to the public library, he only to be told that the book he wanted was gone. If the circumstance is considered now, there are two options. We can either get the electronical version online or check online if the books are still available before we go to the library. Internet help us to approach more information and save our time on finding them.
Secondly, the medical technology has developed dramatically. Many diseases considered untreatable in our grandfathers’ age can be treated nowadays. In addition, with advanced facilities, doctors can easily and accurately differentiate the illness, so that the patients can suffer less. Medical technology even turn organ transplant into reality. One of my grandfather’s friends had to cut off his legs because of the car accident, I think maybe there are more treatments nowadays for him rather than lose his legs. To some extent, medical technology can make us live longer than before.
Finally, the development of transportation shorten the distance of two locations. High-speed railways are getting faster and faster. My grandfather said that he needed two hours to reach Beijing, our capital city, but now it only takes me half an hour to go there. Also, we can transport perishable goods which would get rotten on the way like fresh fruits and seafood by fast delivery and developed preservative skills. We can experience food from thousands of miles away. The development of transportation unite the whole world closely.
To wrap up, our life today is much easier and more comfortable than before because of the development of technologies in terms of internet, medical treatment and transportation. If I’m asked, I would say our life will become better and better in the future.
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Essay evaluation report
when our 40 years ago
40 years ago
the invention of the Internet bring us to an unprecedented and unpredictable situation
the invention of the Internet brings us to an unprecedented and unpredictable situation
he only to be told that the book he wanted was gone.
he is told that the book he wanted was gone.
Internet help us to approach more information and save our time on finding them.
Internet helps us to approach more information and saves our time on finding them.
the development of transportation shorten the distance of two locations.
the development of transportation shortens the distance of two locations.
Sentence: We can either get the electronical version online or check online if the books are still available before we go to the library.
Error: electronical Suggestion: electronic
Sentence: Many diseases considered untreatable in our grandfathers' age can be treated nowadays.
Error: untreatable Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2 //issues on singular/plural
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 1895 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.948 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.959 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.652 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.149 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.264 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.481 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i think, in addition, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1780104712 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15293244099 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604712041885 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7814174965 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6086956522 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4347826087 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116843680645 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331484308711 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497633775479 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802808560122 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653478317783 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.