In general, what students learn from school are ideas and concepts rather than facts. Lacking mature cognitive capacity, students need some fundamental concepts to help them understand the world when the facts are too complicated for them to deal with. However, I don’t agree with the statement saying that it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. The reasons are as follows.
First of all, some knowledge can be acquired through ideas and concepts. Based on my personal experience as a teacher, standardizing knowledge into universal ideas and concepts makes students assessment doable and easy. On the other hand, some knowledge can be obtained only through facts. Take learning English for example, students in China struggle with so-called grammar which is even unfamiliar to the native speakers. Those experts turn English into measurable grammar so that teachers can mark students easily. Some of my students studying abroad told me that although they got high marks in English domestically, it’s still a problem for them to communicate with local people because they never learn the real conversation from ideas and concepts.
Secondly, understanding ideas and concepts separately enlarge the gap between the school and society. Some ideas students learn from school are theoretically right but is not adopted most time when it comes to reality because there are other ways which can optimize the benefits. Moreover, most students can neither recall what they learned immediately according to the situation nor see the connections between ideas and operations because they have never been shown in school. Many researches indicate that nearly 70 percent of students with jobs related to their majors end up relearning all the basic knowledges because they are totally different from what they learned in school . Students should learn more facts which could come in handy when they start their careers.
Finally, there are some opinions arguing that students are not capable of understanding the facts. Some facts are so overwhelming that even adults cannot manage it. I agree with this point to some extent. My position is that schools can increase the amount of facts they teach students as they growing up. For instance, some facts difficult to elementary school students probably are something easy to cope with for high school students, not to say university students. So our education system should pay attention to proportion of the concepts and facts concerning the age of students.
To wrap up, learning facts is as important as understanding ideas and concepts, for some knowledge can only be learned from facts. It’s also necessary for students to be familiar with facts of the career they are going to step in. Facts also play an increasingly important role in students life as they growing up.
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Essay evaluation report
understanding ideas and concepts separately enlarge the gap
understanding ideas and concepts separately enlarges the gap
Some ideas students learn from school are theoretically right but is not adopted most time when it comes to reality
Some ideas students learn from school are theoretically right but is not adopted most time when they come to reality //'they' refers to Some ideas
Some of my students studying abroad told me that although they got high marks in English domestically, it’s still a problem for them to communicate with local people because they never learn the real conversation from ideas and concepts.
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns. if it refers to 'local people', it should be:
with local people who never learn the real conversation from ideas and concepts.
as they growing up.
as they are growing up.
in students life as they growing up.
in students' life as they are growing up.
Sentence: Based on my personal experience as a teacher, standardizing knowledge into universal ideas and concepts makes students assessment doable and easy.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and assessment
all the basic knowledges
all the basic knowledge
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30 //ideas are great.
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2367 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.09 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.281 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 684, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...fferent from what they learned in school . Students should learn more facts which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, in general, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25431034483 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6407744023 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495689655172 0.524837075471 94% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8886244595 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.583333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275772446873 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986480184183 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967521690631 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198404271732 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122010665041 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.