Peoples behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making
Peoples behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. When we get born, we are surrounded by our environment and start to get all kinds of influences, including family background, nature, education, culture, political events, and everything. Some may argue that themselves are conscious and what they do is base on their own volition, but I seriously doubt that.
I’m not saying that there might be an almighty god beyond this world and control everything. But I’m saying that from biology perspective, human beings, after all, are just a bunch of protein compounds and water, making decision based on chemical reactions in their brain, and this could also imply the very fact that, we are never free, and perhaps, ever.
When we are young, most of the time we don’t make decision, what we do is because we are told to do. Our parents tell us to study hard, so we study hard. Our teacher teach us math, so we learn math.
For more educated families, their parents would probably buy additional learning material, so the children could do better in school with higher chances. If we born in typical American family, we would eat just like what our parents eat in American way, low chances for Chinese food. Everything we do can be easily explained with probability, statistics, so obviously we are like animal, repeatedly doing things predictable. From this example, it is enough to infer that if something is predictable, that means we know the relation between its cause and result, and therefore prove that it is determined by some forces.
However, somehow things are getting unclear and arbitrary when we pass adolescent, we start to become independent and make decisions and take responsibilities on our own. We longer follow every rules set by our parents, and sometimes even skip classes. Things are so random that it is unlikely to prognosticate any more. So could that means the statement no longer hold anymore?
From the physics point of view, if we know the function of an object, we are able to predict its motion, velocity, location, and so on. But there was a turning point since the development of field of quantum mechanics. It founds that the behavior of the molecules is perfectly random, and thus, unpredictable. So there do exist something which can’t be determined by forces.
Nevertheless, physics also tell us the rule of entropy, which means that the quantum mechanic theory can be hold only in molecule scale. In human beings scale, everything is not random. The reason we can’t predict human behavior after adolescent is just merely because we don’t have enough informations to make decent prediction. Nowadays, new technology such as artificial intelligence can predict human behavior with high accuracy. Base on the past data, they are able to predict our future motions, our preferences, habits and so on. That means, our decision making, free thinking, and everything could be just the result of some yet unknown factors.
It is clear to say that people are not of their own making. From the example, we adduce that if something is predictable that means it is under control of the rules. And based on physics, probability, and statistics, though arbitrary, we can still predict human behavior with high accuracy, and hence vicariously prove that human beings are determined by their enviroment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 272, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...itical events, and everything. Some may argue that themselves are conscious and what ...
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Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'bore'?
Suggestion: bore
...er in school with higher chances. If we born in typical American family, we would ea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, after all, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 33.0505617978 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2838.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 560.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06785714286 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75480794916 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5125 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 875.7 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 6.24550561798 304% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.77640449438 788% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7207211179 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8620689655 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3103448276 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31034482759 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172117086855 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625609668346 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147655503038 0.0758088955206 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968578698435 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964413892965 0.0667264976115 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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