Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, magazine, newspaper and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people.
Celebrities are the epitome of success for many thanks to the publicity they receive from social media and are, more often than not, imitated by those who have an insatiable desire for fame. Stemming from this fact a relevant question that is a moot point is whether behavior and action of well-known people are advertised in social media like television, magazine, newspaper and so forth. Due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general agreement on this question. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that pays attention to the life of celebrities might have deleterious effects on people's lives especially youth. The following reasons will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
To commence with, for many people celebrities serve as an arbiters taste, morality and public opinion. When different kinds of disorders like short term relationship, drugs or alcohol leading celebrities, mature people would think that their life is not ideal but fans of these stars disagree. Generally phrased, when televisions or other social media take celebrities' behavior into consideration, some youth are more likely to listen to the word of well-known people than their own parent. For instance, many famous individuals do not make a secret of alcohol or drug abuse and this can provide fertile ground for teenagers to mimic immoral behaviors. To elucidate more on this issue, advertise these kinds of behaviors might make young people feel that overdose, drug abuse, and other negative behaviors are acceptable.
Another reason that should not go unnoticed is that pay attention too much to the life of celebrities not only will have negative impacts on look and personality of youth but also on their health. To put it in another word, sometimes celebrities present on the screen or glamorized advertise with smoking in the media or magazines in an inappropriate way and people will think that it is acceptable. Going into the depth, destructive habit by celebrities not only can destroy mental and physical health but also can contribute greatly to the low self-esteem. However, glamorized or advertise well-known people's life will not only introduce them to the other nations but also will expand our culture and civilization owing to the fact that celebrities are the symbol of culture in every given society.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that pay too much attention to the life of famous people through social media will certainly various merits and drawbacks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an inappropriate way" with adverb for "inappropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... with smoking in the media or magazines in an inappropriate way and people will think that it is accept...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, for instance, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20443349754 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80713087358 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532019704433 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.3872228716 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.866666667 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0666666667 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157495198675 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539307277426 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515210384638 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11023019093 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464684740423 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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