It is considered that whether the government should ban extreme sports including skydiving and skiing. It is argued by some that these sports should be banned due to its danger. In my opinion, I believe that people should be allowed to play these sports as long as these are fully and safely equipped.
First of all, any extreme sports would be tested for its safety before letting people participate, therefore these activities are not considered as a serious issue that should be prohibited. Moreover, these extreme sports, which are quite popular with the public for several years, have not been banned up to now illustrate the fact that these activities have been acknowledged by the government. Adequate training and preparation would be provided to the participants to minimise the probability of accidents. For instance, anyone wanting to participate in skydiving alone must has a legal license showing that they have had appropriate training and practices, otherwise, they need to accompany with a professional who also has a legal license.
Secondly, it would be practically impossible to ban extreme sports due to its demand from the community. As many people find these sports to be exciting and satisfying their self-esteem, therefore, it is unreasonable to prohibit others to stop playing their favourite sport. Furthermore, many researchers have found that these activities are benefited to our life such as boosting self-confidence, handling stressful situations and improving our mental state. In other word, people having low self-esteem often lacks of faith in ourselves, and these extreme activities prove our capableness, which resulted in improving our confidence.
In conclusion, although extreme sports such as skiing and skydiving seem to be dangerous, I believe that these activities should not be banned because not only these are safe but also help to improve our mental health.
- Some people think that the government should pay one of the parents of very young children to stay at home to look after their children.What do you think would be the advantages and disadvantages of this policy? 84
- Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. 73
- Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 46
- The Graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 84
- Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...lity of accidents. For instance, anyone wanting to participate in skydiving alone must ...
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Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...also help to improve our mental health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94937093104 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543333333333 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.0424125673 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.75 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179585622835 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834529774977 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526230422834 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134270852886 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410085176989 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.