There is no doubt that every society and country need people who have broaden of mind and very keen to make a decision. Some people think juveniles and teenagers have a inexperience thought as a result they have not any portion in important decision, others believe that they are full of positive energy. As far as I concern, I firmly agree by former group by following reasons.
To commence, the first reasons that should be taken into consideration is that teenagers have lack of experience. Our society are a big family, for this, people who want to make a decision, should recognize right and wrong. It is true that teenagers are eager to solve problems but unfortunately they have limit mind because their age. Moreover, teenagers do not familiar by kind of issues in the society as experience. To illustrate my point, in every society, we have kind of disaster such as earthquake, flood, global warming and so on. As a result, all of this catastrophic, a young man or young woman should be have a great knowledge and information in order to control and organize the society and people. So, by more experience about any issues, more thinking and making good decision.
Furthermore, young man and woman nowadays, in this age, have more stress that adults so, it makes them in a critical condition to make a good decision. Without doubt, teenagers are more concern about future job, find a partner for married, academic knowledge and so on. As a result, it make them sometimes distraction and confusing about what they want to say or which job they want to do and which decision they want to make. In contrast, adult and people who want to make a plan for communities and people, are very sure about what they want to do. So, all decision they make are compelling and consensus. Therefore, definitely for people and society should employ by good confident and appropriate decision.
In conclusion, to recapitulate the reasons, juvenile and teenager not only do not have a proper experience ,but also they have less confident and full of stress because of serious issues .Consequently, they need more time to become a perfect expert and specialist by gaining more academic knowledge and experience.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'broadened'.
Suggestion: broadened
...ociety and country need people who have broaden of mind and very keen to make a decisio...
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Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ople think juveniles and teenagers have a inexperience thought as a result they h...
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Line 2, column 616, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had'?
Suggestion: had
...c, a young man or young woman should be have a great knowledge and information in or...
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Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ic knowledge and so on. As a result, it make them sometimes distraction and confusin...
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Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...not only do not have a proper experience ,but also they have less confident and fu...
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Line 4, column 187, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...full of stress because of serious issues .Consequently, they need more time to bec...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Consequently
...ll of stress because of serious issues .Consequently, they need more time to become a perfec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8670212766 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73620971316 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0291614835 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.647058824 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1176470588 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0733828902449 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289155141221 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0226442372274 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.050463313405 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0048736757629 0.0645574589148 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.