Tpo 19
In this set of material, the article and the lecture disagree on the merit of whether Buzzers; the advertisers hired people who promote products to people they know or meet, are behave spontaneously, or they are a bunch of liars that pretend what they are saying about the products. The writer in the passage goes with a lot of critics against them. He states that consumers should know if those buzzers got paid for what they are saying, or those buzzers pretend to lobby the customers, and the worst thing is that their job leads them to behave dishonesty with their friends and relatives. In contrary, the man in the lecture challenges this idea of the passage and presents three reasons proving that those suggestions of the writer are skeptical. Following is a brief interpretation to his perspective.
First of all, the reading passage claims that the customer should have an idea whether that buzzer got paid for his/her advertising of the product to be sure those people are not trying to mislead them. However, the man in the lecture who works like a buzzer refutes this point. He believes that companies know that previously. Therefore, when they hire people as buzzers, they choose a customer who likes their product in order to guarantee the ability of convincing consumers. So, they are not liars.
Second, the writer asserts that the buzzers could pretend what they are and they are suspicious people. Nevertheless, the lecture casts doubt on the article. Based on the man's personal experience, he thinks that people are fascinated with their role, and they believe in them. For example, they ask they several questions about the product. If they were not, why do you think they use questions.
Last but not the least, the author argues that this job put those buzzers at the risk of losing their honesty and their trust with their relatives. Whereas, the man in the lecture opposes this argument. He thinks that this job would help those people to become more trustworthy and respective among their friends because buzzers usually like the product they are advertising. He gives an example of a cell phone that he was buzzing about, he liked it and was capable of convincing people about it.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
are behave spontaneously
are behaving spontaneously
behave spontaneously
a bunch of liars that pretend what they are saying
a bunch of liars who pretend what they are saying
flaws:
No. of Words: 378 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes. those can be removed from the introduction:
The writer in the passage goes with a lot of critics against them. He states that consumers should know if those buzzers got paid for what they are saying, or those buzzers pretend to lobby the customers, and the worst thing is that their job leads them to behave dishonesty with their friends and relatives. In contrary, the man in the lecture challenges this idea of the passage and presents three reasons proving that those suggestions of the writer are skeptical.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 12
No. of Words: 378 250
No. of Characters: 1787 1200
No. of Different Words: 176 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.728 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.362 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.264 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.302 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'behaved'.
Suggestion: behaved
...oducts to people they know or meet, are behave spontaneously, or they are a bunch of l...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y and their trust with their relatives. Whereas, the man in the lecture opposes this ar...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 22.412803532 290% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 377.0 270.72406181 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86206896552 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48233916972 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 145.348785872 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493368700265 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 419.366225166 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.116997792494 1709% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1179457471 49.2860985944 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4736842105 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410896338778 0.272083759551 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12864946734 0.0996497079465 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912113565637 0.0662205650399 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272147912563 0.162205337803 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660868101318 0.0443174109184 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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