No one can deny the fact that there are few things more important than choosing jobs for children, for it will shape their life for at least several years or even longer and will also influence their economical conditions and social status. Some might contend that since success is highly desired in our career, it is better to take jobs that are similar to our parents', so we can get more guidance. However, experience and support are not enough to make one perform well, actually there are more important elements including personal interests. What is more, finding different jobs can stimulate social mobility, thus bringing improvements and changes to the family.
First and foremost, it is undeniable that the biggest advantages of following the path of parents is that young adults are able to get much more valuable experience and guidance compared to others. However, I assert this support from parents is limited. With the swift development of technology, the chances are the parents may not know how to solve a problem in their fields with latest technologies, thus making their previous working experience not that useful.
Secondly, it is generally believed were people to succeed, they must love what they do. If children only choose their jobs according to that of their parents, it is unlikely that they truly like that work, not to say they are enthusiastic about what they work on. In this circumstance, the chances are that young adults can not figure out the meaning of doing this particular job and lose the motivation to work hard.
Last but not least, following the paths of parents rules out the possibility of social mobility. In a BBC report, the journalist randomly interviewed two taxi drivers in the city of Shanghai, and was surprised to found that both of their daughters were studying economics. With the advent of public education, every one is supposed to have the ability to work in the field they want to, regardless of their parents' jobs.
For the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe it is much more crucial for a young adult to choose a job different from their parents’.
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 58
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...en longer and will also influence their economical conditions and social status. Some migh...
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Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
... how to solve a problem in their fields with latest technologies, thus making their previou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, at least, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96638655462 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63344356127 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554621848739 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.8822961617 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.642857143 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331375708023 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105110075398 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852462270364 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189521651276 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855493785908 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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