The charts show the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts show the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by A on Wed, 03/08/2017 - 02:51

The given pie charts depict and compare between how Australian students chose their paths after their graduation from high school in 1980, 1990, and 2000.

Overall, throughout the years, the number of Australian school levers who decided to have further education noticeably dropped, while the percentage of students who were employed was dramatically grown.

In 1980, half of Australian school levers preferred pursuing further education. This figure decreased in 1990 and 2000 (38% and 37% respectively). In addition, the number of high school graduation students who unemployed fluctuated throughout the years to be slightly dropped in the last year (10%, 12% and 8%) respectively.

On the other hand, the percentage of Australian students who were employed after their graduation was 40% in 1980, then it increased by 10% to 15% in 1990 and 2000 respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a unemployed'.
Suggestion: who is a unemployed
...mber of high school graduation students who unemployed fluctuated throughout the years to be s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, while, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 736.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 135.0 196.424390244 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45185185185 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.4086580994 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87857608452 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 78.0 106.607317073 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 190.8 283.868780488 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8183258017 43.030603864 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.666666667 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.23603664747 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124376109687 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681136494461 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431278918508 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825896715527 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283199929929 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 11.4140731707 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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