TPO10 Intergrated Writing
The reading and listening materials have a conflict of opinions about which can better explain the decline of sea otters, environmental pollution or predation theory. The author believes that it is the environmental pollution that causes this problem, which is contradicted by the following lecture.
For starters, the writer claims that there are some sources of pollution known by people while the professor views this issue from an opposite angle. According to her, actually people have not found dead sea otters washing off the beaches. That is, if this decline is due to contamination, it is by no means appropriate that there is not any remnant of it. Yet, if the cause is predators, they would be eaten immediately, which could explain the absent of remnants.
In addition, the passage states that only environmental pollution can lead to entire drop. However, the speaker opposes this view by saying that because whales have been hunted by human, orcas are highly likely to change their diet. In this situation, the small sea mammals, such as sea lions and sea otters, who are available, become their alternative prey.
Finally, the writer argues that the influence of predators could not result in uneven pattern of decline. By contrast, in accordance with the professor, his opinion does not hold water. The reason is that sea otters are more likely to choose their location that are inaccessible to orcas, as they would deplete there. In this case, the shallow and rocky location of the sea that big orcas cannot approach is their good choice. Thus, the population of there remains.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...this decline is due to contamination, it is by no means appropriate that there is...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, however, if, so, thus, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07196969697 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61320538827 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3196163346 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6428571429 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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