Some people think that the only way to judge someone's success in business is by the amount of money they make.
Is the money a true indicator of the success of a business?
In what other ways could success in a business be measured?
My writing
Let us start by considering the facts that money is one of the most necessary elements in our life. On the other hand, how much money ones have is unable to reflect their own succeed on account of three factors. Not only like that, there are a lot of others points can tell people' achievements in life.
It is clear that money is only the tip of the iceberg when you judge somebody. Firstly, a lot of people who born in rich families can enjoy life with the best facilities and come into huge amount of these property without effort. Secondly, there are a lot of people take a fortune of their luck, they meet right time and a great chance to develop their business. Lastly, most of them also are the safe ones who keep earning, spending and put by their money without risking to take a real delight in life.
On the other hand, one's success can be judge from many different aspects from the way they work to the way people live. The position humans play in the society, company and also the influence can tell some parts of those people. How they devoted their time and money to contribute to their dream, their job and also the world can tell their attempts to make their idea come true.
Furthermore, the humans being' success can be tell through the way people look up them. How they live, treat and also inspire others is reflected by their relationship with people. The more they can devoted and sacrifice to make the world become better, the more successful they become in the life.
To draw the conclusion, one can said that however wealthy you are, it cannot show how hard and successful you have been. We should take their position, influence and relationship into consideration before jump to judgement of their real life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this property' or 'these properties'?
Suggestion: this property; these properties
...facilities and come into huge amount of these property without effort. Secondly, there are a l...
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Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risking taking'.
Suggestion: risking taking
...spending and put by their money without risking to take a real delight in life. On the other...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... delight in life. On the other hand, ones success can be judge from many differen...
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Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...er hand, ones success can be judge from many different aspects from the way they work to the w...
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Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'devote'
Suggestion: devote
...tionship with people. The more they can devoted and sacrifice to make the world become ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5873015873 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2485066851 2.80592935109 80% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.384769539078 780% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.4863264013 49.4020404114 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208264954836 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078036984778 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662038355967 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124827408771 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616102674026 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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