Many people believe that newcomers should take part in the traditional activities of places where they landed in. While those actions could have some benefits, I believe that traditional participation should depend on foreigners.
On the one hand, follow the traditional practices can have some profound effect on newcomers' lives. Firsty, obbeying the native rules could prevent outsiders from getting unnecessary problems. Since there are some behaviors or deeds that might be considered as rude in some places, as a result, foreigners could get away from many troubles if they acknowledge these unnamed laws. For example, tourists who visit India should use their right hand when eating because using left hand is prohibited here. Secondly, participate in native customs is a good way to becomes closer with local people. By joining together with natives, newcomers can show their respects toward local cultural heritage, which may earns residents' hospitality in return.
On the other hand, I believe that outsiders should have the right to do whatever they want. Firstly, get involved in traditional customs could have some potential problems that detrimental affect strangers' health. For example, Asian countries are usually known for their diverse cuisines and many of the dishes might be toxic or allergen for newcomers. So to prevent tourists from getting food poisoning, many local authorities suggest that newcomers should aware of what they eat. In addition, many traditions or customs might not suitable for foreigners. Some of the native practices are even considered as inappropriate or bizarre in foreigners' point of views. Therefore, outsiders should be free to choose what traditional activities they want to participate.
In conclusion, while the participation of non-native residents in native customs can have some benefits, I believe that it should be up to their choices.
- The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 79
- The best way to solve the world s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement 69
- The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. 76
- The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. 67
- The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 558, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...toms might not suitable for foreigners. Some of the native practices are even considered as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49829351536 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78497457002 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563139931741 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7035083518 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.6875 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3125 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144647413677 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516576869404 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379013030653 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907205491534 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454272349056 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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