There is a controversial debate surrounding the issue of youngsters leisure time throughout the globe in this era. It is often said that youth have more tendency to pass their free time purchasing in shopping malls. Some scholars claim that it would influence both individuals and communities in great extent detrimentally. As far as I am concerned, this idea seems thoroughly true. Not only would it creativity and intelligence of people in society.
On the one hand, nowadays young are more fond of squandering their money on buying goods that available in market. Although shopping in term of clothes would result in a growth in self-confidence and self-esteem of young people, sometimes they are not in need of the things that they purchase. Unfortunately, it has spread over the young as an addiction and they are spontaneously urged to head to bazaar and buy numerous commodities in row. For instance, these days girls are becoming more fashionable and it have become like a habit for them regarding acquisition of recent outfits. They spend more than 10 million RS in a time through buying five or six jeans irrespective of thinking that it is maybe the salary of one person in a month. Therefore, this phenomenon would subsequently lead to financial problems in future people life.
On the other hand, in the scale of society, people are far from being creative and intelligence in the light of the fact that they spend wide amount of time on trifles. Of course, it is OK to put a portion of the blame on commercials. By the advent of the modern technology, young are readily susceptible to be lured to go to shopping mall and waste their time. For example, according to the recent survey conducted by Asia University, a young woman spends regularly two hours a day in the market. As long as the person is shopaholic maybe almost the whole of a day would be allocated to shopping. However, in some occasion people are motivated to hang out with their friend in order to shop. Therefore, this would readily contribute to lack of achievement in education and dealing with more innovative tasks.
To sum up, it is transparently manifest that excessive shopping in the market is a waste of time. Not only would it easily cause to undergo financial crisis, but it is possible to make society less creative and smart.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 511, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...ls are becoming more fashionable and it have become like a habit for them regarding ...
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Line 5, column 499, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...egularly two hours a day in the market. As long as the person is shopaholic maybe ...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'undergoing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: undergoing
...of time. Not only would it easily cause to undergo financial crisis, but it is possible to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, for example, for instance, of course, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86983287475 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0269808131 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272164839771 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724617373412 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543522687017 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152153534843 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068336802082 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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