Undoubtedly, it has been an important question to governments whether to spend money on upper education or children education in order to achieve development. From my estimation, although investing on university may lead to bringing some advantages in a short while, spending money on children is needed to achieve consistent development. some reasons are scrutinized as follows.
Firstly, children are the basic part of a pedagogic system. Spending on them is an essential work for evolving a country. Although universities are the most important part of an educational system, governments should not focus on them immensely. By spending money on children, each country can establish their basin of education's structure. A glance at developed educational systems such as what is seen in Finland reveals many points in spending money on children to increase creativity and efficient of them. Therefore it seems it will be better that government spends more money for educating children than that of universities.
Admittedly, children's mind is similar to liquid which can shape immediately when placed in every mold. According to psychologists, children can be modified before 10 years old conveniently and after that, this process may come hard. Thus it will be more reasonable for the government to provide some source of money and facilities to shape children's mind in profitable methods. Besides, some students in the university in many countries are too old to be reformed in some aspects. Hence spending money in the university should be adequate not as much as children education budget.
Finally, blossoming in a country does not occur accidentally. Sociologist believes that children are the future of a country. It means that every child can be considered as a potential for government and can be a gear of evolution system in the next few years. Children can be taught different skills by the government so that in the future they give back this investment to their societies. Consequently, progress in a country will depend on the amount of investing in children.
In sum, due to aforementioned reasons, I believe that compared to universities, spending money on children will be more beneficial. However, the government should not be unaware of planning the universities budget.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32967032967 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10984157148 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521978021978 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7907474069 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.380952381 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303363587842 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101254451865 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839274541049 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181037914369 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799596515496 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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