The reading and the lecture both are discussing about the medical information which whether record in paper or electronic system. The author of the reading believes that doctors should put the medical data in the electronic system rather than in paper. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the reading and she thinks that the benefits of this approach are not very certain.
first of all, The passage claims that the electronic records create a situation in which cost will increased but the professor contradicts this statement by explaining that the doctors who adapt themselves to use electronic record cannot discontinue the using of paper. Since they keep the paper for emergency condition and they should pay storage cost for keeping that.
Secondly, The author states that using electronic medical records can lead to error reduction. The lecturer rejects this idea by saying that doctors use paper for examining. She believes that they take note and write prescription and their staff should enter this information to the computer. So this stuff may interpret data wrongly.
Thirdly, the passage contends that electronic medical can help the medical research. The professor oppose this idea by explaining that doctors in this condition have a difficult access to the information. If they want to gather data from computer they should follow strict rules. Also tough rules cause the privacy of medical information of people. This is a complicated procedure and they should obtain the patient's permit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...electronic system rather than in paper. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...of this approach are not very certain. first of all, The passage claims that the ele...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 100, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...s create a situation in which cost will increased but the professor contradicts this stat...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 99, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'opposes'.
Suggestion: opposes
...elp the medical research. The professor oppose this idea by explaining that doctors in...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 166, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'difficult access'.
Suggestion: difficult access
...ing that doctors in this condition have a difficult access to the information. If they want to gat...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... a difficult access to the information. If they want to gather data from computer ...
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Line 4, column 280, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...mputer they should follow strict rules. Also tough rules cause the privacy of medica...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 1373.03311258 93% => OK
No of words: 244.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23360655738 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54495657145 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532786885246 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 384.3 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.6335696055 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2142857143 110.228320801 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400463363763 0.272083759551 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137375894498 0.0996497079465 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118635066017 0.0662205650399 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246142231649 0.162205337803 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263340267874 0.0443174109184 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.