What historical event in your country has had a major effect on your country?
Give reasons and examples to support your response.
I am Indonesian citizen and proud being it. I love the liberty for delivering my opinion freely or without anxiety because my country has its independence since 1945. It means had been 67 years ago. Thus, today, it becomes one of memorial event which brings right and obligation for every person around me and develops economic and builds law independently. Hence, we make merry every year.
After my country is being independent, I ever read historical book which explains more about it. There are many office like House of Representative Building, Bank, and so on in the center of city, which is built by society and architect. People like young and adult also get well education in school who builds by colony before. However, there are many historical building from colony like college and the street name that still exist. Hence, it needs repair to make it better and well-looked. The building is being reconstructive and appear symbol that representative Indonesian characteristic, for example the roof top of the building is changes, become more traditional such as Rumah Joglo as symbol of Javanese people.
Beside all of above, government make policy and develop economy aspect. The aspect is consist of the role of trading, regulation of transportation, national income, and so on. All of it causes policy in every aspect more strict. We should comply with it, for example in transportation aspect. The minister of transportation states that every people who want to buy their own-car should have garage in house. Also the life cycle use of car is not more than five years. It all policy is made to reduce air pollution and decrease traffic-jam.
Furthermore, being independent makes people have their own right and obligation. People can complain and obtain their own right if they feel suffer. For instance, when I bought car in official-dealer, I have got some trouble in fuel while I drove. The advertise told me that the fuel of that car is used for 10 liters/km. In fact, I spent 7 liters/km. I felt like suffer so I made complain to the dealer and also the institution which handled and protected consumer right.
To sum up, I personally state that independent-day is the memorial event in my country. Thus, we celebrate it every year royally.
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Sentence: I am Indonesian citizen and proud being it.
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Suggestion: Refer to being
Sentence: It means been 67 years ago.
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Suggestion: Refer to It and means had
Sentence: Beside all of above, government make policy and develop economy aspect.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace make with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: The aspect is consist of the role of trading, regulation of transportation, national income, and so on.
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Suggestion: Refer to is and consist
Sentence: I felt like suffer so I made complain to the dealer and also the institution which handled and protected consumer right.
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Suggestion: Refer to like and suffer
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